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0 posted 2000-09-29 12:31 PM


Splitting my veins I let the blood ooze ,

Trickling with a burning desire my fingers broaden,

Thoughts of your surmise around my neck tightens,

Choking on truth I wheeze  for fabrication,

Reality besieged with the being of its creation,

Veins overflowing with deception now,

Such sadness of my part, you wonder how?



Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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1 posted 2000-09-29 12:46 PM


I really liked this poem.  It is very graphic.  The imagery that is used with the painful description made me feel the hurt that is being expressed.  The use of physical pain to describe emotional pain is very effective.
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2 posted 2000-09-29 03:41 PM


Oh My !!
such a powerful poem.
Great Job

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3 posted 2000-10-28 02:15 AM


Dark knight wish that i show you guys the real world and so I did  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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4 posted 2000-10-28 10:38 PM


dark and intriguing. I like it
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5 posted 2000-10-30 01:56 AM


I try to be as evil as I can be. HEHE.  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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