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catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-09-28 01:54 PM


Distant land of happiness
promised hope of nothing less.

Ever seek elusive dream
looking for the perfect scheme.

Gold, it's said, for me awaits
copper poured out as the bait.

Love worth more than all the gold
still I wait, lonely and cold.

Rainbow beckons overhead
I must go where I am led.

Rain clouds hide beneath the hue
can't predict what he will do.

Love, the rainbow of my heart
longs to come in from the dark.

Must give love, or I will lose
without love, I starve the muse...


To anyone who reads this-If you have any ideas for a better way to wrap this up, please tell me. It feels slightly incomplete to me.


© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
bluebrdy65
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
1 posted 2000-09-28 07:12 PM


Catalina
Nope I cant think of a better way to end this
But I see you have out done yourself
this is a great poem I loved it
Bluebrdy

melroseg
Junior Member
since 2000-09-29
Posts 16

2 posted 2000-09-29 12:55 PM


I think you ended it perfectly.  I like it, because I can relate to the way you feel.  
EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
3 posted 2000-09-29 08:30 AM


"Love worth more than all the gold
still I wait, lonely and cold."

Love these lines, great writing!



"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

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