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Xeonox
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0 posted 2000-09-27 10:54 PM



Take a sip from this chalice,

Wondering what secrecy it holds,

Fluid of darkness fills your lungs cold,

Gasp of air you ask no more,

Accepting your fate evermore.


Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



© Copyright 2000 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
VypEr
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1 posted 2000-09-27 11:00 PM


Very well written...short but potent nonetheless... lol, a darker version of Alice's "drink me", perhaps?
Erin
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2 posted 2000-09-28 12:07 PM


Good one. I was just watching a movie not to long ago where a guy had to choose a cup to find his fate. It was really funny though. I dont know what I am talking about. Good work though!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

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3 posted 2000-09-29 08:13 AM


Nice and dark..Maybe Anne Rice would let you do the preface to her next book? I like this better than her husbands poems..
catalinamoon

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4 posted 2000-09-29 08:20 AM


Xeonox,
great poem!! Can't wait to see more like that.

There's a difference between knowing a path and walking that path....

moshpit
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5 posted 2000-09-29 09:07 AM


weird.. but really nice.. i like it.

Jannel
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6 posted 2000-10-02 04:05 PM


nice. definitely dark. i picture a silver chalice with a deep red drink.
shadydaze
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7 posted 2000-10-03 01:46 AM


what's in the cup?
CitiZen-One
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8 posted 2000-10-03 04:56 PM


Hail the Hemlock!! Deliver of Men from a world of parasitic trolls, sheeple and grass chewing cattle.
Lady Lost
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9 posted 2000-10-04 07:13 PM


You never cease to have me mesmorized by your writings...  You are truly a profound individual.  I know what's in the cup..but it's probably not the same as what is in yours......beth

"And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..."
- REA

LM
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10 posted 2000-10-05 04:05 PM


Wow, great one! I love the imagery, your work is so unique and wonderful!
Take Care!



"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


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