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blondegirl10101
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since 2000-09-19
Posts 16


0 posted 2000-09-22 01:03 PM


i gave you my love  
and you took it.
you set me free
like a bird in flight.
you stayed by my side
through the loneliest nights.

i gave you the choice
to love me, you could have
been with me forever.
you said you would!
but you lied.

when you left,
all the love died inside.  
i spent my nights
at home, all alone
and i cried.

the person i once was
had died, i became bitter, and cold,
my heart had grown old.
i felt used and unloved.
i am a girl with no love,
because i gave it to you
and you took it and left,
with out giving anything in
return.



© Copyright 2000 kristin hahn - All Rights Reserved
gjam
Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-09-22 01:06 PM


This is good...i had the same experience very recently...it hurts..but it gets better...keep writing...Greg
Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
2 posted 2000-09-22 02:45 PM


Great, sad poem. I know how u feel .You are not alone. Hang in there.

Xeonox  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
3 posted 2000-09-22 03:07 PM


Heartbreak suck.  Your poem is very emotional and touching.  Great job.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

4 posted 2000-09-23 05:06 PM


Hey, this was very nice entrance  
Welcome to passions, hope you'll enjoy your staying here!
Don't give up hope, love will hit you when you least expect it (that's what I'm trying to convince myself of...).
Take Care!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


CrEaTuRe
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
5 posted 2000-09-24 12:48 PM


nice work ....love sucks  at times but the light is bound to come back soon .... take care and welcome to DP  

Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
6 posted 2000-09-24 03:34 PM


Love does suck, a lot of the time.  It's too bad it can't be perfect all of the time.  We throw our trust to someone so easily.  All of us have been guilty of that.  The problem is, you keep getting burned, you keep getting a little harder on the outside.  This one talks to me.  Thanks for writing what a lot of us have been through.

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

darkstar
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
7 posted 2000-09-24 08:20 PM


awww....I know the feeling...welcome to passions too...good poem.

Dark Star

DeathTrippy
Junior Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 45
WY USA
8 posted 2000-09-25 01:50 AM


This stirs the hate in my heart anew.  Ever increasing is the pain of love betrayed, until in the end I am afraid to Love even myself.
Snowdwen
Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 75
Louisiana
9 posted 2000-09-25 11:09 AM


Hang in there.. I know all too well how you feel. Everything will get much better, just wate and see... and Welcome!
Michell

"You live you learn and life moves on"



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