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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~

0 posted 2000-09-21 09:14 AM




Dear God,

I have been hurt in many ways
that the one thing I long for
is just some happy days.
The pain is hurting more & more.
And I have this inner feeling
that the devil may soon score.
I dont like to feel like this
and maybe with your help this pain
will be set free.
It is so hard for me,
to change to the way I wish to be.
All I am asking for,
is just a little love.
I want you to guide me,
onto the chosen path from above.

Sincerely
A growing pain
< !signature-->

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*


[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-21-2000).]

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gjam
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since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-09-21 11:11 AM


very nice Erin....the only way to true happiness is from above...i have strayed..but you keep asking...he gives what we need when we need it...i really liked your poem..i need to remember in my search what is important...Greg
Snowdwen
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 75
Louisiana
2 posted 2000-09-21 11:37 AM


Nicely done Erin.. Just like Greg I have left the path that you follow, and have given up. Never give up everything works out when you look up to the sky. Michell
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-21 03:39 PM


This poem wasnt actually my point of view. I was trying to write it coming from a friends point of view that is having a hard time right now. Thank you's both very much for the replies.

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2000-09-21 04:33 PM


I have experienced this cycle of pain and it is a struggle to let go of the pain and the sadness and reach out for happiness, to desire it, to want it more than anything in this world, and it does come as we redirect our thoughts and desires and as we embrace it...James
qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
5 posted 2000-09-21 09:33 PM


Wow, Erin, how is it that we never met, but have such similiar thoughts? Its kinda scary. This was another great 1   keep smiling   & keep writin   LOVE ELMO <3
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-09-22 01:35 AM


Thank you's both for reading my work. It really means alot to me.

Elmo~~~I dont know what to tell you, but great minds think alike!!!


*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2000-09-22 08:13 AM


*sigh*  Good writing ERIN    Take care.

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
8 posted 2000-09-22 11:25 AM


God not only listens to your prayers,
He answers them. beautiful prayer.

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

9 posted 2000-09-22 12:42 PM


Hey! This is really nice... sometimes you just don't really know what else to do but pray to God he'll send you a little love... I think he's pretty tired of my chattering already   If he heard me...
Hope everything's alright or better with your sis and everything. Take Care!



"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

10 posted 2000-09-22 12:43 PM


Hey! This is really nice... sometimes you just don't really know what else to do but pray to God he'll send you a little love... I think he's pretty tired of my chattering already   If he heard me...
Hope everything's alright or better with your sis and everything. Take Care!



"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
11 posted 2000-09-22 02:52 PM


Thank you all for replying to my poem. I didnt think it was all that good. You all really brightened up my day.

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

a_little_girl
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since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
12 posted 2000-09-22 03:14 PM


This is a really good job, ERIN. We all need a prayer to God everyone now and then.
--Little Girl

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
13 posted 2000-09-22 07:27 PM



Very well expressed.  I often write letters to God like this in my prayers...eventually He does answer them, in His own time, in His own way  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



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