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Scarlet Lady
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 242
Midwest

0 posted 2000-09-19 10:29 PM


Remember?

The fire in my soul?
The woman who wanted you,
Even more than you wanted her!

Remember the red hot lover she was
The one who made your blood boil?
The one who smelled so exotic and far away
The woman who wore many costumes
Just to please you, Just too
Tease ONLY you!

The woman who enjoyed it all
The one who screamed with delight!
And squirmed so hard under your fancy flight!
The woman who has listened to your every insight
Heard every whisper you had to say
Took it all into to her  like her last breath!

The one who dreamed of so much more
The one who wept when you walked away?
Remember her?
Remember the woman who would of given all
To your beckon call?

The one who adored your every glance
And wanted you at every chance
Remember that lady?

I hope so
she still remains
She  only wishes you felt the same
But she is so unsure of your position
So she remains in silent remission

In this sad supposition
As she once again ponders

Is this really

ME

I hope you will see?




[This message has been edited by Illusion (edited 09-20-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Lynne - All Rights Reserved
bluebrdy65
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
1 posted 2000-09-19 11:31 PM


Wonderful work here
I can relate to this poem so well
remaining in remission
giving it all
just waiting
great work
Blue

DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
2 posted 2000-09-20 11:33 AM


  "the one who adored your every glance
and wanted you at every chance"
beautiful...i understand this one way to much.


EVEN ANGELS FALL.

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
3 posted 2000-09-20 12:35 PM


I enjoyed this poem very much. I appreciate the urgent desire at the beginning that finally dwindles into despondency at the end. Very well structured and written. If it's about you, I hope things work out!  

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

4 posted 2000-09-21 06:01 PM


Ouch...
"Remember the woman who would of given all
To your beckon call?
The one who adored your every glance
And wanted you at every chance"

How familliar...   sigh....
Hope everythign works out for you, it really touched me...
All the best!


"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-09-22 06:46 AM


Love the way you wrote this...James
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