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JulieAnn
Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

0 posted 2000-09-16 12:05 PM



final inspection
of the human race
trilogy of souls
left
without a trace
man
face to face
with man
the eyes
hollow
different
somehow
than the ones
we knew
when we were young
changed somehow
have they gained
their control?
when we weren't looking?
eyes shut
for just a moment
snuck in
through the back door
who left it open?
were they invited?
who let them in?
their ship bound for earth
to find out just how much
a human soul is worth
how long have they been here?
how long have I been gone?
how many yesterdays
have I missed?
caged inside my brain
they want to know
what drives a Man insane
i won't let them in
i won't let them win
closing the gate now
mind goes black
as mankind prepares
for the attack....



Julie :)



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Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-16 01:48 PM


Many times I have felt like shutting the whole damn world out but if I do then where would you be?LOL  Wonderful write my friend and very powerful.
taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-09-16 10:07 PM


Powerful poem Julie!    Particularly the ending!  Take care!

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

gjam
Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
3 posted 2000-09-16 10:55 PM


Hello...i liked this one...something about it...good job....Greg
BirdeeB
Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106
USA
4 posted 2000-09-17 10:39 AM


A good look at the human race..I like it, it makes ya think of how our world is today
Birdee

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2000-09-17 03:40 PM


Good poem Julie, there's something about it that's like looking in a mirror.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

glorybox
Junior Member
since 2000-09-17
Posts 26

6 posted 2000-09-17 03:54 PM


very cool poem
the concep is sometimes thought yet never said
we came to this planet somehow and took it over
we destroy it on a daily basis
we forget how precious our lives are
we forget how precious the planet is
like I said, very cool poem.

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