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LM
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since 2000-08-03
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0 posted 2000-09-14 04:01 AM



Tribute to my 5 years of insanity...


Depression reached a whole new level
Beeing so far... it breaks my heart
Poor soul was taken by the devil
Who left me nothing but his card.
How does it feel to drive me crazy?
How does it feel to hold my heart?
How would you know, I never told you
What's it like to cry for you tonight.
You wouldn't know, I wouldn't say
The words I scream and shout inside
Five dozen months, two thousand days
I wished to have you by my side...
How does it feel to kill me gently
But be the reason I'm alive?
How does it feel to be the only
Important person in my life?
Forbidden love, forbidden thoughts,
Still dancing, racing in my mind
Five years I keep unspoken words
And pray someday you will be mine.
How strange, since you have no idea...
I dream you almost every night
Close my eyes with thoughts of being
Your woman, not a troubled child.

© Copyright 2000 LM - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-14 07:13 AM


This was a nice piece, which i enjoyed reading. You can almost feel the emotion spurting from it. Nice work.
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-09-14 07:18 AM


Oh my, I am joining you again in this one. The one I am seeing soon, has been in my heart for 9 years. And has NO idea the depth of my feeling. Don't you want to just shout it out some day?
This is a great poem, really like the flow, and of course, the content.
PS The coors song is great. I think it inspired me...

LM
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Posts 585

3 posted 2000-09-14 07:48 AM


Thanks !!!  
I'm glad you enjoyed it  

Catalinamoon:
I wanted to scream it so many times, instead i have to hide it and denie it everytime somebody asks me about my feelings!
It's such a strange and unpleasant situation...
Thank you for understanding yet again... I've made another attempt to send you an e-mail, hope this time it'll be succesful.  

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-09-14 09:32 AM


LM~~~This was a great piece of work!!!But why are you hiding your feelings?Just tell this person how you feel. Does this person feel the same about you??
summer
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5 posted 2000-09-14 01:04 PM


that was good !!! i like the 5 dozen months 2000 days that was such a strong statement..keep up the great work
LM
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Posts 585

6 posted 2000-09-14 01:30 PM


Erin: he doesn't and he can't feel the same... you know something? I'll e-mail you and maybe tell you all about it if you're interested in hearing a strange story  
Thanks for the reply  

Summer: thanks for your comment  
It took me sometime, I wanted to emphasize how long it is going on... Glad you liked it!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2000-09-14 02:51 PM


"Five dozen months."  very nice line.
"Close my eyes with thoughts
of being your woman.
Not a troubled child."  Intensity...
James

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

8 posted 2000-09-14 03:44 PM


Thanks a lot James I'm really flattered by your comments  

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
9 posted 2000-09-14 04:40 PM


Sure Im intrested in hearing the story. Thats if you want to tell me it!!!
Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
10 posted 2000-09-15 06:43 PM


WOW!!  Very intense!! Sometimes it hurts as bad to let it out as it does to keep it in.
   Five years can seem an eternity!!
  
           Thanx!

Click



LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

11 posted 2000-09-15 07:02 PM


Thank you click  
In my case...almost all of my "adult" life...

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
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Angels Camp
12 posted 2000-09-16 12:01 PM


Hell kid it only took me a few monts to go insaine and I never recovered.

Great expression here kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
13 posted 2000-09-16 02:21 AM


LM,
I too liked the five dozen months 2000 days.
Great write.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

14 posted 2000-09-16 06:47 AM


Joel: Hehe, thanks for the comment!
It also took me few months but lasted much much longer...   So far no recovery expected...

Kethry: thanks, I'm glad you liked it!



"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

15 posted 2000-09-16 08:59 AM


Hmm... expressed a lot in this... felt the pain... look after yourself.  

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

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