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gjam
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since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas

0 posted 2000-09-12 12:39 PM




  She is such a mystery
A smile in the sky
  Turns the gray to blue
But I don't know why

  She has alot of issues
she causes lot's of pain
  with one night of passion
I m pulled back in again

  I'v tried to keep my distance
I've tried to give it space
  But when I close my eyes
all i see is her face

  Her pretty blue eyes
like a clear sky
  trying not to fall in love
and asking myself why

  I live to see her smile
I love to see her face
  but I can't have her heart
all this time i waste.

© Copyright 2000 Greg Jamison - All Rights Reserved
Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
1 posted 2000-09-12 12:54 PM


Hi gjam,

Welcome to passions it's so nice to have you here, wonderful poetry here, its sad when only one appears to be in love, very much enjoyed.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Victoria
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

2 posted 2000-09-12 01:07 PM


I dont think it is a waste because you
have written a lovely poem about it.  

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-09-12 05:51 PM


Nice job!!I dont see it as a waste of time either. Its a learning experience.

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

G. A. Webb
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since 2000-01-21
Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA
4 posted 2000-09-12 08:42 PM


PERFICT! I totaly can relate as I'm sure you already know. I liked this allot! Keep it up, Bravo!  

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't


gjam
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since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
5 posted 2000-09-13 12:53 PM


Thanks everyone....i actually like this one myself..it's only my second but i'll keep trying.  Thanks for your interest
Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
6 posted 2000-09-13 05:57 AM


eeey! that's what we're here for!!

"

  She has alot of issues
she causes lots of pain
  with one night of passion
I m pulled back in again

  I've tried to keep my distance
I've tried to give it space
  But when I close my eyes
all I see is her face"

GREAT part!! luvd it!

luvz, Virgin Suïcide


I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
7 posted 2000-09-13 12:32 PM


Nicely done....i liked it a lot....still i don't think anything is a waste of time....just enjoy yourself in the moment while it lasts....just remeber what you got out of something...never walk away with nothing learned....

Julie :)



LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

8 posted 2000-09-13 05:03 PM


Hey  
Great poem, I really enjoyed and relate to it deeply.
" I live to see her smile " is such a perfect line... Thanks for sharing, I know about this kind of waste of time myself...
Take Care!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


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