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eegood
Junior Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 41
Chicago,IL

0 posted 2000-09-11 06:10 PM


It's midnight
   as I turn out the light.
I close my eyes,
   yet, I see you.
Why do I still feel the way I do?

I held onto the tears
   when you left...
You didn't see them,
   as I wept.

I don't know how long
   I can go on like this
      pretending my world didn't end
When it's you I miss...
  
It's hard to hold back the tears
      overflowing in my heart
But harder to stop them at night
      when my control falls apart.
        
I look out the window
      nothing but darkness I see...
         But that is nothing
      compared to the emptiness
         within me....

© Copyright 2000 eegood - All Rights Reserved
Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-11 06:42 PM


WOW this is really good. It sounds like you just poured out all that you are feeling. Whoever this was must have been really special. And I hope that one day you and this person end up back together.

~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~

a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
2 posted 2000-09-11 07:00 PM


We all have to pour out sometime. Glad that you decided to pour it out here, eegood.
--Little Girl
quote:
The little girl runs and plays within her own world of fantasy. She is the future.

a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
3 posted 2000-09-11 07:03 PM


We all have to pour out sometime. Glad that you decided to pour it out here, eegood.
--Little Girl

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-09-11 10:52 PM


The pain you are feeling is so well portrayed here. I have been there, and visit often, that lonely space, missing the one you love.
Take care.
catalinamoon

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

5 posted 2000-09-11 11:52 PM


Yours words really touched my heart.  I hope everything ends up okay for you.  Take care.
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

gjam
Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
6 posted 2000-09-12 12:29 PM


...This is me exactly...I feel your pain. Nothing we can do...great poem
Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-09-12 12:33 PM


beautiful, I hope things work out for you.

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