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Jannel
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0 posted 2000-09-10 09:52 PM


uninspired angels collect on the ground
and make a slight crunching noise
as i tread though the chilly autumn morning
carrying borrowed beauty to a more rightful home
before the sun can warm my head
and make me smile again

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silentsky
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1 posted 2000-09-11 04:31 AM


beautiful poem...
i feel the atmosphere and the feeling...
shira

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2 posted 2000-09-11 03:40 PM


burrowed beauty- simply ingenius. That is something I'd like to use in a poem one day. I come up with a lot of that kind of stuff. Keep it up....the poem was great!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Jannel
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Muncie, IN, USA
3 posted 2000-09-12 01:20 AM


thank you shira and dopey. and fell free to use the borrowed beauty. this started from the uninspired angels, actually, and i think i tried to usse that line in three poems before it finally latched on to this one.  
much love,

jann elizabeth

Don't take any wooden nickels
When you sell your soul
Devil lover, time awaits you
Now the party's over
You're on your own

-the eels

summer
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long beach .ca.usa
4 posted 2000-09-12 01:23 AM


i enjoyed this one, thank you, it was one of those that made me say "hum"
keep up the great work

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