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silentsky
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since 2000-08-09
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0 posted 2000-09-09 01:44 PM


its the way i climbed out of bed this morning
its the way i gave myself that look in the mirror
and then all through the day
i could see me
all arms and legs like i was as a child
climbing into your lap
a little smile
full of nonexistent innocence
asking to be stroked
like the kitten i wish i still was

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poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
1 posted 2000-09-10 01:05 AM


"nonexistant innocence"
we all often need to feely innocent again..like a child...i liked this...very nice.
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-09-10 07:11 AM


Hmm... I liked this one too silentsky... if you are referring to same, sometimes it would be nice to slip back to childhood... it brings with it a feeling of security and peace, doesn't it?  And of course, when everything is well, you can't but help purr in contentment    Take care!
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

3 posted 2000-09-10 07:13 AM


Cute...  
I liked it!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"


Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2000-09-10 07:30 AM


silentsky,
I liked this. Oh the innocence of kittenhood.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-09-10 08:11 PM


I want to come back as a cat, with a loving Mommy just like me.  Free to come and go as you please.  Love available anytime, all you have to do is ask!!  And that someone feeds you, combs you, cares for you... ah.. nothing finer.
Liked this piece reminded me of the cat or being a child (where the weight of the world is something you've never known).  
Great work  

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~



Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
6 posted 2000-09-10 09:38 PM


this was an incredible metaphor and very well written. i love it. mrow.

jann elizabeth

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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
7 posted 2000-09-11 03:34 PM


I thought this poem was EXTREMELY cute. Made me just wanna hug you. Keep it up!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


ilph
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since 2000-07-28
Posts 78

8 posted 2000-09-11 09:04 PM


Shira,

i am enjoying your continuing theme of miniaturisation and split physicality.

you spark pretty images.

im sure your kittys enjoyed this one.

Josh.


summer
Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 80
long beach .ca.usa
9 posted 2000-09-12 04:23 PM


i liked this ...i tottally now how you felt...i hope you dont mind you have inspired me to write something dealing with lions....im a leo and find i have alot in common with the lion.....great job...
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