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Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

0 posted 2000-09-07 06:16 PM


this is not my normal style, i'm much more of a free verse person... it just came to me the other night as i tried to sleep. it's meant to be a song, and possibly (hopefully!), i will get to perform it tomorrow night.


airplanes and architects

crash burning
into distant perspectives of my sight
i know that i'm not fine
stay together
till we wake one day to see forevers we wasted
we wasted all our time

so sleep far away tonight
and stay removed from me
know no reasons
know no rights or wrongs or betters
just promise me you'll stay away forever

crash falling
into strange encounters in my sight
they tell me that i will be just fine
days
i'd miss them
i'll smile one day to see i never
wasted any of my time

sleep far away tonight
and slip on out of me
know my reasons
know no sins or sleepless nights
just promise me you'll stay away forever

crash smolder
with the dying embers of my life
someday
someday i'll be fine
flow beneath me
as i stand in line to watch
the sunset
we captured just in time

so sleep far away tonight
then fall back into me
know the reasons
that love was not in vain
just promise not to stay
away


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darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
1 posted 2000-09-07 08:31 PM


It's cool...it'll probably be a great song...

Dark Star

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
2 posted 2000-09-08 08:22 AM


an interesting piece but, I must admit, I was a bit confused by the stay, go, play..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
3 posted 2000-09-08 01:06 PM


thanks guys. the reason it is confusing is because i am confused. it came out of the break up of a long term relationship that i went through recently. i laid in bed the other night thinking about how i never wanted to see him again because it hurts so much and also about how life is completely unbearable sometimes. i looked up and there was an airplane outside my window and it seemed as though it was going to crash and obliterate everything, and i thought how sad that would be since i have so much living left to do.  the song is meant to be a progression out of a relationship, which is what accounts for the duality of the piece.
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