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Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
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0 posted 2000-09-03 10:55 AM


I really don't want to
really don't
But I just can't help it
help it at all

I really don't want it
want it this way
But I just can't get
get those feelings away

I really don't want this
crying out loud
But I just can't help it
help feeling left out

I really don't want to
be all alone
But I just can't keep
keep you with me

I'll always be
left over here
And you shall be gone
away from my tears

Damn, this just came up in like 5 min. or so.... Weird...

love to all!
Virgin Suïcide


"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

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Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
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1 posted 2000-09-03 11:06 AM


hmz, I just read it over...and it sux.....

love...


"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-09-04 03:52 PM


I usually don't like 5 minute poems cause I'm thinking how the heck can she write that in 5 and it takes me ten...ha...ha..
actually I have written a poem in 10 but that was just the basic idea or outline and then I had to go back and work with it for a while...and a while could be ten more minutes or an hour or so...sometimes I write parts of a poem and let it lay for weeks and pull it out later when I have the proper inspiration to edit or add or subtract...James

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
3 posted 2000-09-04 03:59 PM


There are minute steaks, why not 5 minute poems..when it flows, it flows..don't question it, just go with it..This is a delightful piece and doesn't .....you know, what you said..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
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4 posted 2000-09-04 04:14 PM


thnx....I was just in a sort of rhymie mood or so...dunno...hehe, finally a poem from me that actually rhymes a bit...don't have that often... But I'll try to take some more time for other poems!  

love, Virgin Suïcide...


"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

5 posted 2000-09-05 12:38 PM


I don't think it sucked at all!    Enjoyed this one of yours immensely!!  Loved ya last line    

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

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