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qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

0 posted 2000-09-03 02:43 AM


NO RETURN

Darkness within
Brightness without
Shadowed by a,
cloud of doubt.
Am I still living,
deep inside?
Lacking pain,
that I hide.
Sharp razor,
not even a flinch.
Trickling blood,
just from a pinch.
Life's a blur,
death sounds clear.
No more need,
to ever fear!
Death welcomes me,
life turns away.
No longer easy,
for me to stay.
I walk toward death,
he grabs my hand.
Life's slipping,
like hourglass sand.
When the last grain,
comes tumbling down,
I change my mind,
& turn around.
Is it too late?
Have I givin in?
Did he take my soul?
I'm now dead within!

<3 ELMO <3

© Copyright 2000 ¢¾ KT ¢¾ - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-09-03 03:35 AM


qtiepieelmo. This is a strong poem, but I think it's gonna get bumped. Are you alright?
Email me if I can help.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

2 posted 2000-09-03 05:14 AM


Qtpie, are you OK?
It's not too late to turn around, you know?

JohnDLeclare
Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43

3 posted 2000-09-03 08:26 AM


very strong poem. It is never to late!

John D LeClare

qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
4 posted 2000-09-03 07:49 PM


Yes, don't worry guys I'm ok for the most part. I just get times when I'm all alone & I have feelings like this. Like I'm dead inside, a walking zombie with no future. I feel i have no purpose sometimes & like my life's going no where. I'm at a tough point in my life right now- college, & I've lost contact with a lot of my close friends & i feel like my past-me is slipping away. Poetry is my voice & the only way i can express myself & it helps so much to get good replies. My boyfriend helps me a lot too he shows me how much i have going for me & i know it will eventually get better. But thanx every1 for being concerned & hopefully this won't get bumped   LOVE ELMO
moshpit
Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
5 posted 2000-09-04 08:28 AM


i hope with all my heart that u don't really mean what u wrote, qtpieelmo.. but anyway, nice piece.

qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
6 posted 2000-09-04 09:25 AM


Well, yes I did mean what I wrote at the time. I never write fake poetry. My poems are my expression, my voice, so everything in them is sincere, but I'm not feeling like this all the time. You can see in some of my poems that I am happy. All of us just have bad times in our life & some bad memories & my poems just focus in on them little pieces of life. I'm glad u all enjoyed it   LOVE ELMO <3
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2000-09-05 10:55 PM


I can understand where you are coming from, but I believe this one just scraps in as passable    It is good you can express these feelings, we all have to, and hopefully expressing and venting helps..
Well written Elmo!!

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~



silentsky
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114

8 posted 2000-09-06 12:49 PM


beautiful poem...
i can understand the feeling...i feel it a lot too...emptiness...hopelessness.
very painful...
shira

Virgin Suïcide
Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
9 posted 2000-09-07 03:59 AM


really a great poem elmo! lucky for you it's not bumped already!! i know the feeling, had it a lot of times...not at the mo I suppose...it comes and it goes, and I've turned around everytime...

take care & a lot of love,
Virgin Suïcide...


"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
10 posted 2000-09-07 02:30 PM


qtpie~~~This is really good. I like it. You should really post more in Teen, your work is good that I had to hunt you down to find it. LOL NAh I didnt hunt you down it found me!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~


darkstar
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
11 posted 2000-09-07 02:54 PM


Really great poem...hope it doesn't get taken off... So many times have I felt like that.

Dark Star

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