navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » Nobody Cares
Dark Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic Nobody Cares Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

0 posted 2000-08-30 03:16 PM


I get good grades,
     Nobody cares.
I do good deeds,
     Nobody cares.
I do my chores,
     Nobody cares.
I'm a loyal friend,
     Nobody cares.
I do what I'm told,
     Nobody cares.
I'm dying inside,
     Nobody cares.
I cry myself to sleep,
     Nobody cares.
I do one thing wrong,
    and suddenly,
  EVERYBODY CARES.
The world is coming to an end,
     Everybody cares.
I'm dead, and once again,
     Nobody cares.



I run, I fall. I walk, I sometimes crawl. I give, I take. I bend and yet somehow I break
~Lil OnE~



© Copyright 2000 Christine L. Kelly - All Rights Reserved
Deranger
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
1 posted 2000-08-30 03:52 PM


“I do one thing wrong,
and suddenly,
EVERYBODY CARES.”

Whoa, I can totally relate!!!  What a rip off eh?  
Well we care here at Dark Passions, we’re kinda like communal crutches for each other.

Have a good day, OR ELSE!  Hahalalala.



----------------------
Spreading insanity, one post at a time

“Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

2 posted 2000-08-30 04:33 PM


You making me smile
  I care!
You're posting this file
  I care!
You're writing those words
  I care!
You're sharing your thoughts
  I care!
You understand
  I care!
You're reaching a hand
  I care!
You're reading my mind
  I care!
You're just one of a kind
I swear!

Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-08-30 07:54 PM


nobody cares your right but someone cares that's me. beautiful poem so true. No one seems to care until you do something wrong it's very sad the way it is. I'm here to say that there are a few that do and I care. I know that I'm not the only one. I know you are the same too.
alot of nobodies makes a nobody
but one somebody makes a voice
that can touch millions
with there choice
to inspire and befriend

boardman
Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 44

4 posted 2000-08-31 12:26 PM


Hi Lil One,

A very true to life Poem.
Nice job. I like it a lot.
Keep up the good work.


Explosions, are just the thoughts of a creative person.
Boardman

!!!
Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)
5 posted 2000-08-31 12:52 PM


It always seems like no one cares about anyone but themselves anymore, y'know. I feel like that sometimes too, but then i look and find that someone does care....Me! Basically, as long as YOU care about what YOU are doing, nothing else should matter much.

Anyways, excellent poem. Keep up the good work!

Xeonox
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
6 posted 2000-08-31 02:59 AM


This is just so original, so fantastic, so superb, so simple yet so exciting.  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
7 posted 2000-08-31 06:24 AM


in my youth, i could certainly relate to this poem.....but now, i agree with !!! when saying that you should be the only one that matters...as long as YOU care...thats all you need.
really great poem
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2000-08-31 08:53 AM


I am one voice but I am singing, I am not alone.
You are one voice and you are singing, I am not alone
We are one voice and we are singing we are not alone.

It's amazing what a difference one vioce makes. So glad to hear yours Lil OnE.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
9 posted 2000-08-31 02:14 PM


Thank you all so very much. Your kind replies to my non-important existance really meant a lot. I've been pretty depressed lately, and even here I almost felt rejected. Thank you for proving me wrong.

I run, I fall. I walk, I sometimes crawl. I give, I take. I bend and yet somehow I break
~Lil OnE~



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
10 posted 2000-08-31 06:38 PM


Good point...thats the way it seems to be sometimes...James
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
11 posted 2000-08-31 06:58 PM


It's true!!  They seem not to notice you then when weak you make some little error, they are all there to pounce on you!!!  I know the feeling well!!
But hon, there is a difference, we care too!
I dont' say things I don't mean hon..you have friends here in Dark and that is enough for now at least.. *hugs*

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
12 posted 2000-09-01 12:10 PM


Hi Lil OnE,

Sweetie, I can totally relate to this I just posted a poem on this very thing, (Just happens to be me) everyone that replyed to this poem is right in what they say, I think the hard part when you are depressed is to beleive that what one convays to you is true, and even here I too have felt like nobody heres my plees for an ear or hug but even here where there is more love than any were else there are moods and ups and downs but that does not mean that we do not care just maybe that we too are having full lives with ups and downs, I am so glad I know how you feel so I can keep you in mind and as I should help in any way I can, thank you so much for your poem it was sad but I-we all do really care and hope you do feel that we do.

Love, Cerenity  


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » Nobody Cares

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary