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silentsky
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114


0 posted 2000-08-29 12:39 PM



love me
please
save me
from my self
take me
away from this existence of mine
envelope me
within yourself
embrace me

all my beauty
and all my ugliness

and never let go

never

© Copyright 2000 silentsky - All Rights Reserved
poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
1 posted 2000-08-29 12:50 PM


"embrace me
all my beauty
and all my ugliness
and never let go
never"

these feelings are shared...we all want to be fully embraced,saved,truly loved.
this was much enjoyed.
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



JSage
Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91
Nashua, NH USA
2 posted 2000-08-29 01:49 PM


simply beautiful... you know how to write of true love.

-Jes

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

3 posted 2000-08-29 04:28 PM


Oooooohhhhhh....silentsky!!!!
that's awesome!! I absolutely loved!
where are you from in Israel?

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

4 posted 2000-08-29 08:02 PM


Superb    But then I adore the word envelope... it can mean so much    I like using it in my poems too!  

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-08-30 01:31 AM


applause to you, Very beautiful
lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-08-30 12:57 PM


I love this, so sweet, yet so desperate. I hope you find someone who does just that! (If you haven't already, that is)

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



boardman
Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 44

7 posted 2000-08-31 12:36 PM


Hi Silentsky,

This one definetly has feeling.
I like the way you use quick snappy lines.
They go real deep.
Keep em coming!


"Explosions, are just the thoughts of a creative person." - Boardman

Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
8 posted 2000-08-31 04:17 PM


I agree with boardman. The small lines pierced my soul... I truly felt this one. It was really, really, REALLY good. Good luck in your search for true love... but it's like a ghost... many talk about it, but only few have truly seen. Great work!!

I run, I fall. I walk, I sometimes crawl. I give, I take. I bend and yet somehow I break
~Lil OnE~



ilph
Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78

9 posted 2000-09-01 01:30 AM



this is an affecting arrangement of words.

you take to love with a scalpel and expertly expose its fragile core.

i read the last line and melt

ilph.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2000-09-02 09:01 AM


Silentsky.
Good things come in small packages this is no exception.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2000-09-04 06:32 PM


Beautiful thoughts and desires that we all need to see fulfilled...James
StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
12 posted 2000-09-04 10:34 PM


what a wonderful poem! Your thoughts were brilliant!! keep it up!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

~*~ :) If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. :) ~*~

Virgin Suïcide
Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
13 posted 2000-09-05 03:26 PM


geez...great poem...like it a lot!!!

love, Virgin Suïcide...

"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
14 posted 2000-09-06 05:19 PM


What are we without love? It is like food. We need it to survive on this earth, to be norished.
--Little One

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