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poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia

0 posted 2000-08-27 11:11 AM



Screaming
and beating you
to the punch-
line.
Who are you?
joker jester
souless molester.
Keep your hands off
of my disease.
Stop feeding me glass
in guise
of chemical balance.
What are you killing,
the me in you
or the you in me?
Laughing Laughing
Sickening Saddening
Stupid Little Man.
Percieve
Believe
I hate you
And you
hate me
because I
share my infection.
You are
sterile
pathetic
and still breathing.
Leave me
alone.
Stop poisoning
me.
Or start sleeping
with both eyes
open.

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

© Copyright 2000 Dawn van Krieken - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-08-27 11:37 AM


Ok I am getting a lock put on my door from now on, sorry bad joke, I can hear this one being screamed out and I am very afraid. A powerful read, each line sent a shiver down my spine.

"I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy

sonjes
Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-08-27 01:48 PM


wow...what a wicked ink you have in your quill...I must say that you drew me in and caused my eyed to grow wide with anticipation for each new word.

Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma


MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
3 posted 2000-08-28 12:07 PM


oh my gawd...evil...yet a good evil...this was so good...i feel like i was there...great peom

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
4 posted 2000-08-28 12:20 PM


Brian: its ok, you dont have to lock your door....i could never get THAT angry with you!

sonjes:thank you! i like that you think i have "wicked ink in my quill"!

MiseryDivine: LOL evil? me evil? thank you so much for that compliment! i sometimes like being evil, makes you feel a bit powerful sometimes!



whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

Professor Gloom
Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
5 posted 2000-08-28 06:09 AM


Interesting read,
could almost hear the screaming.
As for Evil being more powerful
than Good.
T'is only a misconception,
it's just that Evil has fewer constraints
on the wielding.

Gloom


poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
6 posted 2000-08-28 11:16 AM


Gloom: i always learn something when you reply...and im grateful for it..thank you for responding with wisdom.
~Dawn

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
7 posted 2000-08-28 01:16 PM


Well, Dawn, I felt this one through and through. Not so much evil to me, as defensive. And striking out at the pain.
Great writing. Take care.
catalinamoon

poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
8 posted 2000-08-28 01:21 PM


thank you!
i feel like ive done too much "striking out in defense to the pain"..want it to stop..just need a rest now and then.

~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

9 posted 2000-08-28 01:27 PM


~Powerful, strong, and very affective writing here Dawn! Whoa!!! Take care of you. *Peace.
AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
10 posted 2000-08-28 11:56 PM


well expressed powerful piece

If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
11 posted 2000-08-29 04:38 AM


spitfire: thanks for that "whoa"!  

AVANTI: thank you for the reply, its much appreciated!

~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
12 posted 2000-08-29 06:18 AM


WoOoOoOh. I'm sleeping with my eyes open, scary write even if it's not aimed at me.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
13 posted 2000-08-29 08:47 AM


Kethry: hahahah...dont worry, you can rest easy! thank you for replying with that very audible "woOoOoOh"!
~Dawn  

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



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