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silentsky
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0 posted 2000-08-25 10:52 AM


existence haunts me
      with its wild-flower eyes
          speaking the myth of fingerprints
  as it lurks in my shadow

i stare at my feet
planted on the ground

wishing i could have retained my innocence forever

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1 posted 2000-08-25 11:32 AM


Don't we all wish this to be true? I like the way you potray the feelings that many of us have in common.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

demoninlove
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Dehradun
2 posted 2000-08-25 12:16 PM


Very lovely thought. And crisply presented.
Deepak



Deranger
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3 posted 2000-08-25 07:43 PM


Innocence is a disease suffered by the young and idealistic.  To survive you must become what surrounds you, darkness and corruption.  



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Isis
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4 posted 2000-08-25 11:47 PM


I don't agree with Deranger's comment!!  You must find peace within yourself, and then share those secrets with others.
AAaah I know, to be that young and innocent again, things I'd have done differently, STILL I am happy to be where I am now, and I'm always remembering to be grateful for what I DO have.
Wonderful musings here!!  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


moshpit
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5 posted 2000-08-26 09:40 AM


the choice of words is beautiful.. but what really blew me away are the last 3 lines, simple, yet so honest.. and true.

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