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sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
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0 posted 2000-08-25 04:48 AM


FLAME:

Torn apart, across, my heart
Being once, being me
Further grown in jaws alone
Wondering what is free

Falling fast, without grasp
Down again below
Failing mine, one at a time
My life, me, slows

Gratings closed, juxtaposed
Life, alive, live
Laws of life within my mind
Dictate: always give

  The candle's flame
  Seems the same
  Then instantly flickers out.

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1 posted 2000-08-25 11:34 AM


I just loved the ending.
The candle's flame
  Seems the same
  Then instantly flickers out.

Great job!!!  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

catalinamoon
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2 posted 2000-08-25 03:53 PM


Very intense and emotional, S. I like this a lot.
Catalinamoon

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