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MiseryDivine
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

0 posted 2000-08-24 10:06 PM


Last nite
i walked with you
along the shores of a private paradise
and
you held my hand
we frolicked and danced
and
you bent down on one knee
on the white sand
and
you gazed into my eyes
and held out to me
a beautiful diamond ring

last nite
i ran away from you
down the shores of an enormous hell
and
you ran after me
i screamed , you yelled
and
you begged me to stay
i can't beleive i let you get down on that knee
and
you fell onto the sand
and started to cry
diamond tears from your eyes



All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

© Copyright 2000 R.t. martini - All Rights Reserved
Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
1 posted 2000-08-24 11:11 PM


beautiful and I hope all works out, there is a season and a time for everything.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-08-24 11:58 PM


Like a movie, but so much more painful because it is really happening to you.  Nicely written and I too hope it all works out hon.  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
3 posted 2000-08-25 01:40 AM


Hi MiseryDivine,

Powerfully emotional, you can fallow your every step, wonderful work here, hope for you the best.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

4 posted 2000-08-25 02:50 AM


Wow!  What a poem!  Sharp and straight to the point... hope it all works out okay for you  
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2000-08-25 07:59 AM


Beautiful poem. Hope it works out.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

6 posted 2000-08-25 06:18 PM


Beautiful poem, why did you run?
MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
7 posted 2000-08-27 02:41 AM


well...it wasn't exactly how i wrote it...im too young for marriage n all but i ran because i'm afraid is all.

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
8 posted 2000-08-27 03:38 AM


MiseryDivine
*hugshugshugs*  have you been watching my life for the past 2 months??  i asked a girl to marry me.  she ran away.  she got scared.  now she left me for another.  i still cry those tears.  hell i am crying now.   great work huun.  please e-mail me.
love ya
jesse


Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart.

silentsky
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114

9 posted 2000-08-27 03:55 AM


i really liked your poem.
expresses a fear that i can connect to...
well written,
shira

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
10 posted 2000-08-27 07:40 AM


Nice expression of your feelings...James
sonjes
Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
11 posted 2000-08-27 01:53 PM


very nice expression, i agree..."diamond tears from your eyes" I especially liked this line...clever use.

Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma


MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
12 posted 2000-08-27 11:03 PM


awww...thank you all for your support! i wasn't expecting so many replies! you guys are so great! thanx again! <3<3<3

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

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