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!!!
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0 posted 2000-08-24 12:58 PM



A Haiku series
Thought i'd try somethin' different
Hope that you enjoy...

To some, when it hits
A most cleansing Purgatory
Or a slow torture

Many in it's ways
Each introduction different
With the same outcome

Sometimes expected
And other times so sudden
So devastating

It makes us stronger
Only in healthy doses
In moderation

In time, you'll feel it,
For it's inescapable
It's a part of you


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-"Victory needs no explaination,
  Defeat allows none."






[This message has been edited by !!! (edited 08-24-2000).]

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Xeonox
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1 posted 2000-08-24 01:35 AM


I like your poem. I never thought of pain in that sense. By the way I like your saying "Victory needs no explaination and Defeat allows none."

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
2 posted 2000-08-24 01:43 PM


!!!
  I liked this one very much.  I believe that this one will be well received on Open Poetry 9 also, especially by Marge Trindal, the Queen of Haiku's.
Again excellent poem.

Garfield

Lil OnE
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
3 posted 2000-08-24 02:32 PM


Sometimes expected, and other times so sudden... so devastating. Loved that stanza. It truly is devastating... well written! I haven't seen a haiku in SO long. Great job!!


Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-08-25 12:12 PM


A pleasant diversion this haiku !!!!
Thanks for sharing it with us  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


CrEaTuRe
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
5 posted 2000-08-25 12:37 PM


it's kinda nice to see a haiku  
Nicely do to as a matter a fact  


Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
6 posted 2000-08-25 01:37 AM


Hi !!!,

Awesome job here, very thought provoking and much wisdom, I cannot get this Haiku thing tried but I'll read all of yours OK.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
7 posted 2000-08-25 02:07 AM


inetrestign format  ..i liked a lot
as for the poem itself..very true...taken in moderation it is healthy for how can we not know true pleasure, if we are but oblivious to pain? i think that is the problem with Plato's "Republic" and other utopian idealized societies.  Thanx for letting me ramble  


"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
8 posted 2000-08-25 06:27 PM


!!!. Great format loved all the Haiku's within the poem. I agree you should post this in open.
Here's a small one in return

Love the promised hope
Even though it causes pain
Living, learning then.

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

!!!
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)
9 posted 2000-08-26 12:11 PM


First off id like to thank all of you for reading my piece, and for your MUCH appriciated responses!!! I apologize that it's taken so long to acknowledge you all, but ive been away from my computer as of late. Well anyway, Thank you all again!
AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
10 posted 2000-08-26 12:40 PM


very well written set of haiku's
well done

If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



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