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morteZ
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since 2000-03-16
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0 posted 2000-08-23 07:35 PM


i'm a killer who hasn't been caught
each day i murder cigerettes with my lungs
my lungs suicide
with my tobacco machines
i'm fooling myself
i am death
i am twenty to a box
love me, hate me, need me
light me, flick me, butt me
lets burn all life together
who cares if its the end
i'll get the end in the end...


"Is there another sadness besides that of death?
Definitly not, because true sadness is black,
devoid of charms, and dreamless."

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1 posted 2000-08-24 01:36 AM


Nice use of object here to show your emotions. Good job!

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
2 posted 2000-08-24 01:07 PM


morteZ,  
  Interesting way to look at smoking.  Silent killer that it is, we know how it affects us, but yet we continue to puff.  I call it "a slow drawn out suicide."
Good peom.

Garfield

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