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catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-08-22 08:09 PM


A weeping Willow near my door,
symbolic of my life before.

Heavy branches sadly bent,
wonder where the vibrance went.

I lean against his trunk so strong,
and think about the loves gone wrong.

I sit under my tree and weep,
he seems the only love I keep.

The rest, they turn to blowing leaves.
Leave me in dust and still in need.

But here in the back yard with me,
my ever faithful Willow tree.

© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
1 posted 2000-08-22 09:16 PM


very nice.  I loved the way you symballized the tree's life to your life and the imagery that you have presented...cool piece indeed, i'm surprised not many have replied...they will soon though    nice poem.

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
2 posted 2000-08-23 02:45 AM


Beautiful Poem. You have loved and so you know the permanance of the Weeping Willow - for only the tears are permanent to remain with us - the rest is the wind - blown away.
Everything about this poem was just right - length,structure,content,flow
Deepak


poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
3 posted 2000-08-23 05:35 AM


I REALLY liked this! very soft, loved the willow tree.....another good one.
~Dawn

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

4 posted 2000-08-23 06:05 AM


Ohh Cat... this is such a beautiful poem    Your words put images in my mind... and, yeah, I love willows!  
moshpit
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
5 posted 2000-08-23 08:51 AM


I sit under my tree and weep,
he seems the only love I keep.

i really love this line.. it's so sad but strangely comforting, at least for me.

Rex
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
6 posted 2000-08-23 02:43 PM


Sandra......'Atta girl! Great!

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-

Dedreia
Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
7 posted 2000-08-23 08:09 PM


I love this...
I sit under my tree and weep,
he seems the only love I keep.
So sweet...Dee  

"It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
8 posted 2000-08-23 11:39 PM


Sweet and melancholy Cat!!  You need a pet too I think?  Make your home, your yard your sanctuary so everywhere you turn there is a friend from nature or a garden statue, to remind you, life is good, life is beautiful, just like you are...  We all need the reminders, and today seems to me like you need a few more..  *hugs* and email me if you need to talk hon.
Isis

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

9 posted 2000-08-24 03:38 AM


I loved it very much, still, loving a tree doesn't quite seem comforting to me...  
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