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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-08-21 04:38 PM


Pass the word that i'm back PLZ. i don't have my computer set up yet but i'll be coming up to the library alot to post so here are a few and if i don't work tomorrow i'll post some more. and i came back to Fl cause me and my family did not like it in SC we'll at least where we moved to. but i'll tell you all more about it later.


Theres a crack in my tub
      Of love
That leaks and seeps
   Into the caseing
     That squeaks
When it's steped on
   and hurt by you.
        So
  Now all the love
   I had for you
   Has leaked on
      Through
       On to
      Someone
        New.


I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
1 posted 2000-08-21 05:26 PM


What an inventive way to convey this feeling! I loved it. Great job, Jeremiah. BTW... where in Fl? I'm in Pasco County  
Great work... keep it up


Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~



Moon Dust
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since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK
2 posted 2000-08-21 06:36 PM


Can relate a lot. Only so recently as those feelings provoked in me. Nicely done.

Lies comfort but the truth burns.


Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-08-21 10:00 PM


Hey kid good to read from you again, and great to see your style has contuned "Great"
I'll be around more also.

loved the poem kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
4 posted 2000-08-22 02:01 AM


My friend when I read the title of your poem I do not have say more. I know before hand that your poems will be great.  



Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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