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Sven
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0 posted 2000-08-20 09:38 PM


i know where you are
i know where you aren't

                                     there/here

i know where i am
i know where i'm not

                                     here/there

i know where you should be
i know where you shouldn't be

                                     here/there

i know where i should be
i know where i shouldn't be

                                     there/here

so why are you?
so why am i?

                                     there/here

who knows?

all i know is you are                there

and i'm not. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 08-20-2000).]

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Xeonox
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1 posted 2000-08-21 12:59 PM


Great poem. Out of the blue, but great.


Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-08-21 05:33 AM


a different poem from you Sir Sven, but all the more attractive... the experiment suits you fine, O Knight...

regards,
sudhir

Kethry
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3 posted 2000-08-21 06:12 AM


Here, there and everywhere I hear your voice and... it is good.

Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Sunnyone
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4 posted 2000-08-21 08:09 AM


Sven....
        You are a master of every style, I can see! I enjoyed reading this very much..it sparked my imagination, and did it with a light touch!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



taramw
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5 posted 2000-08-21 10:15 AM


Wow! This is terrific!   And yes, different... but glad it is!  
Marina
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6 posted 2000-08-21 10:22 AM


Such confusion in this one Sven.  She sounds as confused as you perhaps.  I really like the style you use here and the impact of the two simple words you use.

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Sven
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7 posted 2000-08-21 07:00 PM


thanks to all. . .

xenox. . . surprised you did I?  thank you my friend. . .

sudhir, just something I was playing around with. . . thanks. . .

kethry, thank you. . . but I don't know that hearing my voice is all that good!

sunny1, not really a master. . . but I do like to change it everyonce in a while. . . thank you. . .  

taramw, glad that you like the different form. . .

marina, thank you my friend. . . confusion reigns. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


monique
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8 posted 2000-08-21 08:42 PM


Down here
Where am at
They would say
Where you at Sven?

monique

catalinamoon
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9 posted 2000-08-21 10:07 PM


Love it, and it's so accurate, the feeling of not knowing where you are, just that you are not where you want to be, by the side of the one that is not there.
catalinamoon

Joel the wolf
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10 posted 2000-08-21 10:11 PM


Yes love the style, hate the feeling.
great work bud.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Lone Wolf
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11 posted 2000-08-21 11:57 PM


This sounds familiar to me....

me here, you there . . . hmmmm

Nice writing.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Sven
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12 posted 2000-08-22 07:15 PM


monique. . . I am here. . . where you at??  Thank you my friend. . .

catalina, it is confusing. . . thanks. . .

Joel, thank you. . . it's not one I'd wish on most people. . .

LW, does it??  It really isn't like anything else that I've written. . . thank you. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Isis
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13 posted 2000-08-22 07:53 PM


Confusion reigns Sven, you summed it up perfectly,  different indeed, but good work as always!!  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


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