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Nikolette Sadness
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0 posted 2000-08-17 05:33 PM


i had this very good friend named Tiffany...her mother was both physically and verbally abusive...i haven't been able to talk to her in a little over 2 years now...so this is for Tiffany...

~Just a little Girl: For Tiffany~

look at her
so thin and pale
crying there
so small and frail

sitting in the corner
darkness calling for her
looking in the mirror
darkness drawing nearer

she'll use the blade
to end her pain
it's over now,
she can't be saved
she'll take her heartache
to the grave

for all the pain she held inside
from darkness pain can never hide

and now little girl
i right this rhyme
your just another face
lost in time.

Nikolette Sadness




i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

© Copyright 2000 Nicole Crisp - All Rights Reserved
bluebrdy65
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Gladys,
1 posted 2000-08-17 06:09 PM


Very good poem

Nikolette Sadness
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2 posted 2000-08-17 06:15 PM


thanks bluebyrd  

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

JOY 14
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3 posted 2000-08-17 06:22 PM


how sad! Hugs for you and Tiffany. It sounds like that was what she needed.

Joy

Kethry
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4 posted 2000-08-18 08:09 AM


Nik, Kethry comes up and gives you a big HUG for you and Tiffany both . Maybe she'll see this and be touched. Maybe even contact you. Whattayano reunions through the net *laughs*
Be well
Kethry



"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LM
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5 posted 2000-08-18 08:30 AM


Every one of your poems seems to send shivers down my spine, your words are so sharp and to the point...
Another job well done!
Hope Tiffany is alright...

Click
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6 posted 2000-08-18 10:19 AM


Nik,
    What a way you have.. to make us feel and think!!   A true poet!  
   Thank you for another touch from someone elses life..

Click


darkstar
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7 posted 2000-08-18 03:25 PM


Good poem Nikol...I can kinda relate to it...hope your friend is ok...

Dark Star

Nikolette Sadness
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8 posted 2000-08-18 09:03 PM


joy, thanx for the reply..i wish i could hug her right now  

kethry, i would be so relieved if that happend...thanx for the reply

LM, well is that a good thing or a bad thing? i hope its good...

Click, thank you veyr much for that wonderful comment..."a true poet" nice ring to it   made my day

Danni, i'm glad you liekd it buddy...

and Tiff, if your out there and you can see it...please contact me...i need to know you are ok

Nik< !signature-->

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.


[This message has been edited by Nikolette Sadness (edited 08-18-2000).]

fractal007
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9 posted 2000-08-18 11:58 PM


Great work!

I like the last line.  It really helps to amplify the scope of the problem of child abuse in our society.  It's very unfortunate that this has to happen.  

LM
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10 posted 2000-08-19 05:23 PM


Good of course!
i wouldn't have responded with something evil...
I like poems that make me feel something, yours sure do!

catalinamoon
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11 posted 2000-08-19 11:01 PM


Nik, very sweet and a sad story told, unfortunately so common. It is good of you to care so much for a friend from the past, in spite of your own pain. Take care. This poem had a very strong feel to it,
catalinamoon

LOTR
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12 posted 2000-08-20 03:19 AM


Once again you bring us something sad yet beautifully written. I wish you luck in meeting this friend again, shes lucky to have you .
         Richi


Look back at your past, but don't stare too long.You might not like what you find

Xeonox
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13 posted 2000-08-20 03:30 AM


what is left to say for the rest have said it all. Great poem


Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Dedreia
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since 2000-07-10
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Kokomo, Indiana, United States
14 posted 2000-08-20 09:59 PM


At first you could have been talking about me...I was like that sad little girl for so many years.  I never believed that ending it was the way though...I always believed that when I grew up I could change it...I love your work...Dee

"It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen

Paula Finn
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15 posted 2000-08-21 12:03 PM


Nik...this is great work honey...you just keep growing in your writing
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