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a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392


0 posted 2000-08-17 01:05 PM




Holding my frigid breath
as the dawn slowly opens.
Facing another day scares me to death.
Shivering in silent torment
as the last slivers of night
embrace my body tight.
Calling back the only comfort I know
as the sun begins it's unwelcome glow.
Existing one moment without you
tears relentlessly at me, through and through.
Begging for sweet dreams
as I curse the light
smothering the sun with deadly screams
Reaching for your body
as you fade into oblivion.
I damn the sun.


[This message has been edited by a-alibaster (edited 08-17-2000).]

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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
1 posted 2000-08-17 02:47 PM


Your poem caught my attention at first 'cause I don't like sunlight at all and now that I've read it I'm glad I did. It was a beautiful poem that expresses something that I don't really see much of in here. Something that I've never been able to put words to. And you did it so well.   Well, I wish you the best of luck...and as the days go on...which they most definately will...your pain will ease until it's just a memory.

                                 Angel


I wish you could hear
the child that cries
in my flesh and makes
my bones ache
-Jewel

~*Angel of Darkness*~



a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

2 posted 2000-08-17 02:55 PM


I thank you for your loving words and am glad that you enjoyed....
I suppose most would take this a words of a lover....believe it or not...they are words of missing my grandmother and grandfather who were taken from me 5 years ago when they were hit by a tanker.....there is not a day that has gone by that I have not missed them so...
at least in the night in sweet dreams I can speak with them and never have to let go.....
Until...ali


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-08-17 03:05 PM


Lots of hurt and pain flowing thruout this poem...I hope that healing and understanding will come to your heart..sorry about your tragic loss..take care...James
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
4 posted 2000-08-17 03:07 PM


Hmm...now I feel silly. lol But oh well...I'm really sorry to hear that. The loss of loved ones is so hard...I'm glad that you at least get to talk to them at night in your dreams. Well, I wish you more wonderful nights then since you, like me, are not a fan of the daytime.

                                 Angel


I wish you could hear
the child that cries
in my flesh and makes
my bones ache
-Jewel

~*Angel of Darkness*~



Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

5 posted 2000-08-17 08:39 PM


Your rhymes are perfect! Breathtakeing poem!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

6 posted 2000-08-18 09:59 AM


Dark Enchantress,
No need to feel silly, I actually like it when some one can read one of my works and take it as they like...makes me think and go back and read it with their perseption. Thank you!!

James,
Thank you for you kind words...I have been told for a while now to "go on" but some days it seems like it was just yesterday. Those days my pen seems to bleed, but I suppose that is a good thing. Thank you once again.

Wren,
I am honoured by your words. They mean a great deal to me and raise my spirits more than you think. Thank you.

Until...ali


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-08-18 12:13 PM


very heartfelt words which I'm sure your grandparents can see from above. Remember there is someone who is always there each and everyday though sunlight seems to blind you it is you Ali. This was very moving and I can understand your sorrows.
!!!
Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)
8 posted 2000-08-18 01:40 PM


This was well-written, and very expressive. You did a nice job on this.
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