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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Fragments of my life flit by seen through kaleidoscope facets here that make me cry and bar my dreams from hope Visions of an earlier me in shredded photographs seen through shrouded memory on jagged broken paths Odd pieces of a jigsaw which doesn't fit together houses built from sticks and straw that can't withstand the weather Slivers of my life I see and never the whole drawing fractured, poignant, lonely me waiting for new dawning Remnants in time half recalled the ragged ending frays into the mists of pain, life stalled the darkening of my days A child's painting, black on black and grotesque mouths that swallow shouting, screaming, reaching back to kill me in its hollow When sunlight streams through windows and fragments fill my soul. I wonder who will mend this doll and heal me, make me whole. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Very vivid and honest...beautiful. Nature, time, and patience are the three great physicians. Just remember that during your process of healing.  Angel I wish you could hear the child that cries in my flesh and makes my bones ache -Jewel ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
And that is what life is Kethry as you have so well put it - fragments - the whole is lost in the maze of lost time. Well written. And there will be a dawn one day! Deepak |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is fantastic, Kethry! Sad and desperate, haunting too, and very good. Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Great images! Good job! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Feeling this intensely. The second and third stanza particularly. Loved this, and sorry you are in such a sad time. Take care Cat... Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think. Lord Byron |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Kethry... Sometimes life does seem fragmented, but as time goes by you can look back and somehow the pieces start fitting together. Time does wonders for many emotional things......this was written beautifully, and I wish you happiness... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
wow this is written so well...tragic as it is..and your choice of words...how I am in love with the second stanza..great piece kethry..I wish the best for you. "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark enchantress - thank you for your comments. Most of my pain is old but when I'm tired poems leak out. demoninlove - thanks for your kinds words. I have seen the dawn and now share my dark times with understanding others. Lotharingia - thanks, your comments are very precious to me. Wren - you make me blush with your kind words. Cat - thanks. I'm not sad exactly, just lonely, and working through old stuff on death anniversaries is always hard. Sunny1 - I'm glad you like my poem. Jnr4eva - Thank you. I'm glad you love the second verse. I've never had anyone in love with my work before. Be well Keth "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Very well put!! I...think I.... I seem to lose pieces of me, alot, lately....I like this poem, it means something to me. Thanx!!! Click |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
This touched a part of me that I can not even place into words! Your imagery is outstanding and so heartfelt are your words that I felt like craddling the doll at the end!! Wonderful!! Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
"Odd pieces of a jigsaw which doesn't fit together houses built from sticks and straw that can't withstand the weather" I loved it, and the whole poem of course... Another great one from you, keep writing! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Click - so glad you could relate. Hope you are manging it. a-alibaster - I'm accepting everyone's hugs, comfort just now and I wrote a poem on called "smiles and hugs" on the open forum to blatantly say so LM - Thanks for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to quote them to me. My poetry always sounds different when I read it back. Sometimes it's a surprise that I actually wrote that. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~KETHRY!!!!!!! WoW, the flow, the wording, the feeling this emits! You done good. Reeeaalll good. Such a somber tale, so well told by you. Please take care. *Peace. *Sending sunshine. |
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