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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2000-08-17 04:10 AM


No Place

Looks like...
all those times I thought my heart was going someplace
were not exactly what they seemed
and now I clearly see
I haven't actually went anyplace
unless I can count my dreams.
Now arriving at the place
that remains the worst of them all.
This place called no place.
That is...
unless you call.
Still...
even if you decide to call
it wouldn't mean a thing at all
unless you have realized you need me
and only you can make that call.
Because if you really do care for me
I would be some place afterall
leaving no place and pursuing a dream
awakened by a needed call.

Jameslee@August16,2000





[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 08-17-2000).]

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LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

1 posted 2000-08-17 05:22 AM


    

so beautifull...

Hope she calls...

Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
2 posted 2000-08-17 11:29 AM


I really like this one James.  I like your ryhme scheme  and the choice of your words.  They are so simple, but say so much.  If only Toronto had a true heart like yours.....


Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Lil OnE
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
3 posted 2000-08-17 03:12 PM


I know this feeling all too well. Except when he called, it was too late, the damage had been done   I hope for your sake, that she calls, but also for hers, being that if she doens't... she is losing a wonderful person. Keep up the wonderful work, jmlee
((HUGS))


Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~



JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-08-17 06:24 PM


Awww. Sad. I liked how you used 'call' in different senses though

Joy

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
5 posted 2000-08-18 10:58 PM


Oh Friend,

A hug blows your way from me, waiting for a call as weighty as this can be hurtful to the soul, and I know you are worthy of much more than pain from someone you shared your love with. I pray all goes the way you wish it.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-08-19 09:08 AM


Thank you Lm, Marina, Lil oNe, Joy and Cerenity for your nice remarks.
Marina thanks for your beautiful words.
Toronto does have a true heart and her name is Marina...believe it...
I have discussed this with Lena many times and damage is being done...I feel rejected..I feel like my feelings have no value..I have told her I want someone that needs me and if she needed me it would be hard for her to not to call me..she keeps saying she'll do better...but we'll see..perhaps I need to accept the truth that she really doesn't need me as much as I need her...
Cerenity thanks for the hug...I hope things turn around for me...I always feel like I still need to look around and find the right woman...I cannot believe one is right unless she can convince me by her actions...James

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
7 posted 2000-08-19 09:58 AM


Hi James,

I just wanted to say that I made the man I am now with prove to me beyond a shadow of a dout that he loved me in every way possiable now to man because I was not going to go through what I had been through before and he no more loves me than the big rock out side my door, I asked for action and I got it but it was not real and I think love must come freely now that I've done it again to myself, but then I could very well be wrong beleive me its totally possiable, you from your loving poetry have shown me some what of the person you are and you DO deserve someone that really loves you and she will come maybe not today but she will be there in your life its a matter of time Oh how I hate that word (YOU TOO) yep keeep that chin up friend your worth it.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
8 posted 2000-08-19 02:19 PM


Thank you for your kind words James.  I can always count on you to put a smile on my face by your sweet words.  A true friend you are......
        
Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2000-08-19 06:46 PM


Here is another one that knows just how I feel. How does everyone keep doing that? I guess we are all in the same ship, sailing in favorable winds one day, a storm the next, and utterly stranded on another. Take care. If she does not call, she loses.
Peace
Catalinamoon


Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.
Lord Byron

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
10 posted 2000-08-19 07:08 PM


The rough seas of life, described so well here hon...  I too hope she calls, but it not, it's her loss, and you need to be reminded of that..  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
Isis ~ Sovereign of the Spirit

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2000-08-20 04:13 PM


Cerenity I am so tired of women telling me they like or care for me and than I realize those are empty words...with feelings come actions...yes.
Marina thank you for your tender friendship..
Catalina I think you want to be needed and appreciated also.
Isis yes it will be her loss...and still her loss is my loss...James

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
12 posted 2000-08-21 09:44 PM


But James you are right, her loss will be your loss also. Some things are worth fighting for, My white dove was, we were married this last August, and you had seen my fight with my emotions and staying power. you have to decide is she worth it, ( the fight ).
love ya kid.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2000-08-31 06:53 PM


Hi Joel...nice to hear from you..yes some things are worth fighting for as you have demonstrated by your words and actions.
I will keep those words in mind.
Congratulations on your marriage to White Dove.  I wish you much happiness.  May you always Love and have her Love...James

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