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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396


0 posted 2000-08-14 09:41 PM


(Just Some Really Angry Words That Fell)~ Tension's Bust


Raging
fires in
my broken
frame I can
see you in the
flame in the puddle
of acid burning flesh
spoiling rotten tissue
meat and yesterday's supper
and bloodied tears like razors
down purple bruised cheeks of sin
I let you in and felt your wrath
before I tasted your poisonous
saliva your mind altering spit
spinning in floods of hatred
and drowning in nights of
you there are fires hot
and chasing tails of
evil of secrets by
and mouth wide I
scream for the
mile for the
tension's
bust.



© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
kat
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since 2000-05-20
Posts 387

1 posted 2000-08-14 09:56 PM


Um SpitFire?  A little ticked are ya?? LOL

Actually kidding aside. This was great!! Loved the images you used to express the tension in this one! As usual, great job!!


kat

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-08-14 10:15 PM


Whew, this was intense. Hope you are ok,
cat...

Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.
Lord Byron

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

3 posted 2000-08-15 01:26 AM


Woah! A tension buster alright! LOL!  Good work though  
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2000-08-15 05:03 AM


Never, never getting on the wrong side of you girl. Great poem, strong images.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

5 posted 2000-08-15 05:14 AM


Whooooohooooooo!
You're one angry girl at the moment, huh?  
Loved the form, like an arrow .

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-08-15 06:04 AM


Wowee fire !
Whadda piece! I loved the references to spitting and fire ! And the rest too, of course!  


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



sash
Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125

7 posted 2000-08-15 06:25 AM


YeeeOwww! Great vent! Great work too! Hope Ya feel better.

     ~Sash~

Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
8 posted 2000-08-15 08:35 PM


WOW. This was intense. I really liked it. I loved the part, "In the flame in the puddle of acid burning flesh spoiling rotten tissue meat and yesterday's supper" This was an awesome piece. I loved it. keep up the great work, and I hope you feel better after all that !!! LOL  

Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~



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