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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-08-14 09:19 PM


You came over towards me,
Calling my name,
What now? I wonder?
Have you not yet sucked out the last ounce of my soul?

A challenge for me is no longer such,
You drain me, you hurt.
I just want to be freed from the chains I'm in.
You say you're gone, but oh wait, not really.

I have this aching, make it go away.
I have this need, make it fade.
I want to be without, but it's lonely here.
Take yourself away from me...remove your vampire grip.

Not written about anyone in particular, kind of life in general, but I can think of a few who might take it personally.   Tell me what you think!

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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1 posted 2000-08-15 01:22 AM


Very good!   The contrasts are well done.
Kethry
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2 posted 2000-08-15 05:06 AM


Well done. I particularly liked remove your vampire grip.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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