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catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-08-11 08:28 PM


Want
the impossible
Dream
the unachievable
Desire
the untouchable
Need
the unaffectionate
Seek
the uncertain
Love
the unfaithful
Cry
for the unworthy.
I am undone.

© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
1 posted 2000-08-11 09:28 PM


WoW...even though this was short and said with few words...it has a very strong message. I like.  

                        Angel


I wish you could hear
the child that cries
in my flesh and makes
my bones ache
-Jewel

~*Angel of Darkness*~


taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-08-12 08:10 AM


Awww... this is sooo good... enjoyed the read  
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2000-08-12 09:35 AM


Sandra,
You constantly amaze me. If I could say what you do in so few words I'd consider myself to be a poet.
Be Well
Lynne


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
4 posted 2000-08-12 11:47 AM


Sandra....
           This one hit right on target!!
           It was UNbelievable (just trying
           to give you a smile!!)
               Seriously, I admire your work,
           as it gets to the point and makes
           a strong statement right out in
           front!!
                 Great job, my friend!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
5 posted 2000-08-12 05:44 PM


you never cease to amaze me.....good grief i have alot to learn from you.....a few little words that pack a huge 'wallop'!
loved this!

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
6 posted 2000-08-12 06:08 PM


Very good!! VERY true!!
  Liked this one!!
          Thanx!!

Click


Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
7 posted 2000-08-12 10:41 PM


How this just flows into the next wonderfully expressed emotion...You have another superb piece here!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

bubbles chan
Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 17

8 posted 2000-08-13 12:20 PM


you are worthy of the title a great poet of few words from this one

Time and space are not constant, but floating around like the inside of a giant metaphysical lava lamp

LOTR
Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 68
New Jersey
9 posted 2000-08-13 01:25 AM


So little words , so much meaning! This almost sounds like the definiition of my life lately, thanks!

Look back at your past, but don't stare too long.You might not like what you find

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

10 posted 2000-08-13 06:17 AM


Same here!

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