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Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

0 posted 2000-08-11 03:53 PM


Present,
but far away.
Asleep,
but still running.
Moving forward,
but falling behind.
Committed,
yet confused.
Achieving,
but never enough.
Dreaming,
but still wishing.
Devestated,
but totally calm.
Surrounded,
but alone.
Free,
but caged.
Screming,
but not making a sound.
Fearless,
but afraid.
Directed,
but lost.
Listening,
but hearing nothing.
Sane,
but going crazy.
Praying,
but nothing happens.
Living,
but why?



Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~


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LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

1 posted 2000-08-11 03:57 PM


Exactly like i feel right now....
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-08-11 03:59 PM


~Welcome Lil One!!! What a poem you've got here. Mmm,...so many things to ponder. Great work. Like the contrasting...I'm picking through each of them and really seeing how they relate to me. Take care LO. *Peace.
Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
3 posted 2000-08-11 04:05 PM


thanks to both of you! I'm not new here, just became a stranger for unmentionable reasons. But thank you for the comments. Oh, and LM.... I hope it gets better for you.

Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~


darkstar
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
4 posted 2000-08-11 11:30 PM


It's really good. I like how you use contradicting phrases to make your point.

Dark Star

Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
5 posted 2000-08-12 03:35 PM


Dark Star,
Thank you very much. I am a walking contradiction, so 'twas natural for me to write this one. But thanks!!  

Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~



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