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catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-08-10 11:46 PM


Careful now, you could be next
he's promised you the very  best

He seems to fill up all your needs
but wait awhile, you should take heed.

He's known for breaking ladies hearts,
You could be next, left torn apart.

Of course it could be different now,
He may be truthful in his vows.

You take your chances with this man,
he'll steal your lifes blood if he can.

Though you may think your love is found,
he'll leave you weeping on the ground.

A sorry mess, that's what you'll be
unless you choose to listen to me...

© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-08-11 12:08 PM


~Cat,...Whoa, what a heavy message! Stong use of words. Great. Take care. *Peace.
nicolette
Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 42
St. Paul, Minnesota
2 posted 2000-08-11 12:24 PM


very powerful message....reminds me of people I know.  very well written...take care.
Kirsty24
Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 40
Australia
3 posted 2000-08-11 01:02 AM


Isn't it amazing how other peoples words sometimes feel like they came straight out of your mouth?? I feel this is a warning that I should have sent to many women over my time. < !signature-->



[This message has been edited by Kirsty24 (edited 08-11-2000).]

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
4 posted 2000-08-12 12:01 PM


Sandra....
          Somehow I feel that this extremely well-written poem should be dedicated to all of the women that have been stepped on in a bad relationship!!
          You told it like it is, was, and probably will be again.
              Nice writing here!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Virgin Suïcide
Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
5 posted 2000-08-12 12:11 PM


well, some guys (men) are like that....but some aren't....

love, Virgin Suïcide...


And I shall not rest, til I get my loved ones back..........

Click
Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
6 posted 2000-08-12 06:01 PM


Good one! Cat, I know people who will promise you the moon & stars just as they slip a knife under your ribs.
  Why do people treat each other so cruely??  Don't we ALL feel pain?  

Click


Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
7 posted 2000-08-12 10:44 PM


I know this person I swear!! It is too bad that we allhave to get our hearts broken, when all we are seeking is unconditional love. Hope you find yours soon...I know you will!!! Wonderful read, packed full of truth!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

LOTR
Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 68
New Jersey
8 posted 2000-08-13 01:33 AM


Very strong stuff here! Reminds me of an ex I knew years ago, she was the basis of alot of my early depressing stuff. Thanks for sharing this!< !signature-->

Look back at your past, but don't stare too long.You might not like what you find

[This message has been edited by LOTR (edited 08-13-2000).]

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

9 posted 2000-08-13 06:11 AM


Such a familliar situation...
but as you know...easier said than done!
Still wonderful piece, take care!

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2000-08-13 06:16 AM


Cat, What a  warning to me, I read your poem and thought this guy I was in a relationship with was exactly like this. Thanks for posting it.  
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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