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Wren
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since 2000-07-05
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0 posted 2000-08-09 09:58 PM



Warm water feeling
My heart is beating madly
Like a fish's tail

(Note: Koi is the Japanese word for BOTH love and carp.)

© Copyright 2000 Wren - All Rights Reserved
bubbles chan
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since 2000-08-08
Posts 17

1 posted 2000-08-09 10:01 PM


Love the use of carp in your haiku it's great!

Time and space are not constant, but floating around like the inside of a giant metaphysical lava lamp

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-08-09 10:26 PM


~Oh,...I can so see this one. Like the duel meaning. Very neat. Mmm,....how 'bout some more of these clever little haiku thingys? Take care. *Peace.
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-08-09 11:10 PM


I agree with Spitfire..would love to see more. Very original, and intriguing!!! Good Job!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-08-10 12:24 PM


This is some fine haiku...loved it.
Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
5 posted 2000-08-10 12:59 PM


very well thought out
enjoyed

Rex

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
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saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-08-10 05:12 AM


This is clever.
This is ACE.
love it!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



allan
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
7 posted 2000-08-10 03:19 PM


A really well written haiku here - one of the very best!

allan

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