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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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She sits a dream f a l l en from good-bye A star, collapsed lightless lay curled in a corner knees hugged pulsar light echoing a quiet death unseen In silent nothing-space comes a spark (flick, flick) of thought struggling 'gainst the oily, smothering choke that is apathy She mourns Passing With the hem of a solar flare caught in the clogs of time frozen She cries pulling to set herself free... "Release me!" "...release me, please so I may live again..." |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I like......I like if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very nice, intriguing writing. Catalinamoon |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
What a lovely picture you have painted in my mind. I truely enjoyed this reverie. -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Have you been hanging out with Severn and Dark Angel???..lol Beautifully rendered. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
... Ms Nic... you dood it again. Broke my jaw with a sudden poetic uppercut. Hard-hitting;soft. Smooth;rough. Powerful;powerful. Did me in lady, grabbed my throat and my heart... and squeezed. of thought struggling 'gainst the oily, smothering choke that is apathy Squeezed my throat realy hard here! Wow ma'am... well done? Trite, I know, but hey, it's obvious that you're the poet here!  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Boy I really like this..the last few lines feel like mine sometimes! |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
See girl? I ain't the only who thinks you are a poet. You just keep outdoing yourself, and for that I am most proud of you. You have a good one, and keep em coming. |
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