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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-08-08 05:12 AM


Other

He thinks
He is
Amazing
So
Hunky-dory
cRaZy

He flashes lashes
In the mirror
Pouts his mouth
In berry-quiver

I know he is
My enemy
Though his smile
Is always friendly

He wants
to replace me
He wants to
Deface me

With lethal injection:
My brother reflection

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Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo




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Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
1 posted 2000-08-08 11:23 AM


HEY  good one!!    I loved the way it just kept flowinggggggg!    Great piece.

DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-08-08 11:28 AM


Very good, Uta. Perhaps you could email me as to the exact meaning. I have 2 thoughts. Awesome poem.
Sandra

allan
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
3 posted 2000-08-08 02:28 PM


Hey hey a flash of colour in the dark! 8or in the mirror?) 'great enigmatic pome Uta. It'll need a few more reads but loved that you were playing with format here... full of interesting twists & turns... 'Great stuff!  
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-08-08 05:43 PM


Uta...I have often thought about that person in the mirror.  Exactly who, or what, is that looking back at me?  Exceptionally expressed.  Hardrock
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-08-08 07:28 PM


Interesting piece here, makes me think about the person I see....Another really good poem!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

6 posted 2000-08-08 10:17 PM


What an interesting twist on things....Great poem, with an even better message behind it.
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

silentsky
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114

7 posted 2000-08-09 08:13 AM


i doubt that my words can do justice to your poem....
but it is written beautifully.
i found myself identifying with content and the words kept pulling me in and out so that i felt as if i was rolling within the poem, flowing through it.


silentsky
Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114

8 posted 2000-08-09 08:13 AM


i doubt that my words can do justice to your poem....
but it is written beautifully.
i found myself identifying with content and the words kept pulling me in and out so that i felt as if i was rolling within the poem, flowing through it.


catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2000-08-09 08:19 AM


Thanks for the info, Uta. Yes, I can see that now, the true story. I was torn between something along those lines, and the person just hating him or her self for some reason. Great, interesting work.
Sandra

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-08-09 12:46 PM


He wants
to replace me
He wants to
Deface me

With lethal injection:
My brother reflection
....

yep says it all... well constructed piece this one...

regards,
sudhir

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