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AnabelleBlue
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 28
NM, USA

0 posted 2000-08-05 01:06 PM


Of Battles Past

With eloquence you hide the pain
my voice simply displays,
two voices crying disillusion
in this juncture from separate paths.

So then by irony cursed
we join each other's regiment
only to create our own conflict
from bits and pieces of the past.

We reach only a short distance
before learned fear and mistrust
shorten the length of our arms,
leaving fingertips to languish alone.

In moments of aching peace,
two so nearly victorious
fail to leave the injuries
at the site of distanced carnage.

Yet our scarred souls
cannot retreat from fire
nor forsake the struggle
and leave our battle defeated.

We continue on
oft caressing then piercing
one another's spirits,
weeping our silent cry.



[This message has been edited by AnabelleBlue (edited 08-05-2000).]

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MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
1 posted 2000-08-05 03:42 PM


a deep read, Ana...enjoyed the last verse especially..

We continue on
oft caressing then piercing
one another's spirits,
weeping our silent cry.

~~smiles
M


Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-08-06 09:20 AM


I'm not sure I understood this, but enjoyed the read. Good poem.
Be well
Kethry.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-08-06 09:50 AM


Ana, love this poem, and the feelings it evokes. It's a sad world, loving and never getting it right. It is so true that past things will try to interefere in whatever relationship we are in.
Catalinamoon / Sandra

AnabelleBlue
Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 28
NM, USA
4 posted 2000-08-06 01:26 PM


Maureen, thank you, as always, especially for help in editing.

Kethry, you've given me a sincere compliment when you say you're not sure what I said.  I am usually so simple voiced that I long for the ability to be puzzling.  So, I deliberately tried to be obtuse.  Hey, it worked!

Sandra, thank you for reading, for the praise, for visiting Songs of the Siren and taking time to email.  It's always nice to hear from another lady.


Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-08-06 01:50 PM


Ana, I found this deep too, yet the complexities of ones writings gets me to think and dig into ones words...I found this excellent!! A great piece

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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