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Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2000-08-04 11:57 PM


Breathless

A kick in the gut
blind side image
leaving him hurting

and wanting

To inspire the fire
and wide eyed glance

That beautiful face
lost in the heat
of a sensual moment

Continual denial
of himself
Easier to cry

No waves, no fear

Shifting his mind
to other things

The car needs new tires...

7/23/00
Gary Pence



"Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
-Edgar Allen Poe


© Copyright 2000 Gary - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-08-05 05:56 AM


This is fantastic! What a slice of emotion! Very well done!  

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-08-05 07:25 AM


Reminescince with a vengance. Well done!
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-08-05 09:01 AM


Jona, Nice Job!! How I can relate to letting my mind "jump" to other thoughts when I am in the middle of something emotional. Loved your poem!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-08-06 10:32 AM


Jonas, I like this a lot. Glad I found it on the back page.
Note to all: I think we often miss some real gems because they drop down so fast. My new plan is to go back 3-5 pages whenever I can.
catalinamoon

Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
5 posted 2000-08-07 01:19 PM


Thank you for reading everyone! This one was a little different for me. More of my experimentation.
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