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The Jackal
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-08-04 10:56 PM


On the deathbed of
               light

Beauty might make the world
    
  look more       sane(like a ~human~ on fire in love with the flames)

Lie to me....i am sure..meaning steals

        everything I live for

Vapar people waaa  vvve on by....

   with their suits and vIolent/vibrant minds

(CAN SEE BUT CANT BE,CAN SEEEEE BUT CANT BE..)

upOn the tower of watered down

Oblivion is rocking slowly
  
         to what little .. lives inside of me

             (the sound of innocence draining
            
           hits like a bullet to the brain..in

stark contrast to the softness ignored

  for a heart that can no longer admit.. pain )



"you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings
you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything"

"so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything"

"I am too connected to you to
Slip away, to fade away.
Days away I still feel you
Touching me, changing me,
And considerately killing me."

The Jackal


© Copyright 2000 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-08-04 11:19 PM


You can feel the pain hon, that is evident in this great piece!! Love the style, the flow, the feeling in this...  Great work  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-08-05 07:50 AM


Did you get burnt. So sorry to hear if that's the case. Great poem though.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-08-06 01:43 PM


~Whoa!!! That is it. Whoa. You  have reached me. I love your way of expressing this. Mmm. More please. Be well. *Peace.
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