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courtney923
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 43


0 posted 2000-08-04 01:15 PM


Ridged times, of past deslave
Hollow body, depict this theme
The sun became black, and rose at the sea
A fog that seeped, into this place
Kept well with the mist, of red decay
One to approach, shall never leave
Weakness is hunted, and sorrow is seiged
Placing a candle, beside my only dream
I try to invision, a place of revene
Trust is for victims, and rights for their slaves
Imprisonment is leathal, controling one's brain
Like a scientific experiment, of feelings in vane
Caught, but not surviving, my mind has seen it's day
Eerie this enchantment, does not lessen any pain
This road I have traveled, has taken over me
Like my existence has vanished,
but my memory still remains

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allan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
1 posted 2000-08-04 03:42 PM


I really liked the imaging in this.  
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-08-05 08:18 AM


Is this the road less travelled or a ghost of yourself.
Be well

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-08-06 01:57 PM


Placing a candle, beside my own dream..I feel a lost soul here..This was well done!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-08-06 08:25 PM


Courtney, I liked this one a lot also. Images very strong and emotional.
Catalinamoon

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