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A gentleman (?) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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A gentleman (?) Dawn breaks the night And proudly enter I, Wearing a suit over White shirt and red tie. Looking better than Anybody else can, Because me - I am a thoroughbred gentleman! To be one-up I pull my co-workers down; Poisoning ears Till I get people to frown. Won't let them Promote him while I can Because me - I am a perfect gentleman! United we stand, Divided we're bound to crack, If you squeal on me, I'll stab you in the back. I live my life Exactly the way as I can, Because me - I am a well-cultured gentleman! I am hooded Wearing a mask so you won't see, The wily animal That lives deep inside of me. Deception seems to be My only master plan, Because me - I am a distinguished gentleman! ------ Note: I am sorry if this sounded caustic to some readers... - Sudhir < !signature--> Darkness imprisoning me All that I see Absolute horror I cannot live I cannot die Trapped in myself Body my holding cell ~ Metallica - One [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-04-2000).] |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Caustic? Not at all! The truth behind many revealed! GreAT! It rings many bells though, unfortunately.  Have you just unmasked such a monster? Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
It's very smooth and facile but I wouldn't like to get on the wrong side of you. Well done! Kethry "There are times in life a kindred spirit comes along. Hold onto those people. They are what makes this life worth living."- Anon |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i like this... a biting look at what is behind some facades.....very well written! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very truthful look behind the exterior of many. Excellent writing, interesting approach. Cat.... |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~I loved this !!! Had an 'IN YOUR FACE' style which I love. Great writtings!~ Beth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Not caustic, sudhir, just very very real... quite a portrait of this guy, and I think most of us have run into him at one time!!! Thank you, sir. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I've worked with him!  Good one Sudhir, brings out the fact that sometimes the people who do these things see themselves as being right in doing them. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--this gentleman is also a lady (er term used loosly) and I worked with her. Great seeing poem! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Is it ok if I say this reminded me slighty of one of my favourite books "American Psycho" "My mask of sanity was a victim of impending slippage." Patrick Bateman in American Psycho. Anyone that point made, a wonderfully written poem. Excellent poem, the reason I refer to the book is that the main character in the book was also a perfect gentleman except for going on the odd killing spree. Ok so it is not that relevant. Great poem. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sudhir,...you have captured this monster's character that is sooo very alive,...eeek at the thought of him (IT). Well written portrayal here. Be well SI. *Peace. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I know him, I've met him, There was even a time I may have been him. Great work! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
This is why I hate corporate America! It promotes this kind of behavior. Unfortunately, corporate America seems to be taking over the world. Nicely done Sudhir. Beware scheming co-workers!! Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks everybody for your kind words of appreciation... I am glad you could relate to this and that you did not find this caustic etc... regards to all, sudhir P.S. Brian, I think I will now have to read the book (if I find it...) |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Suhir, Ive seen this way too many times in my work experience, and you told it the best!! Just too bad there has to be truth to it. Great read!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks Deborah for reading and joining in with your response... regards, sudhir |
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