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The Glass of air that Seperates |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Glass of Air that Separates In the room I roamed with ear pressed against the glass of air that separated my table from theirs. Lost to my companion, consumed by a conversation from behind, words with no faces. A toast to beginnings and endings, what do you say? I heard. Out with the old, in with the new. To beginnings and endings, and to truth, no matter what. I looked up to the clear eyed watch of my companion, who understood the nature of my listening A toast, I thought, a brown table, a glass, the napkin with a wet circle. How many things are permanent? The circle, a symbol of continuity and continuation, yet, this circle will be gone soon, dried up and thrown away, carted off and dumped into a landfill and forever changed. Are we in life, like the napkin, imprinted, used and thrown away? He touched the circle on my finger, the symbol of our love, he touched it with his own. Uncertain of direction I listened still. I toast to truth and just straight lines, I heard. I looked down at our hands now interlocked warm on warm and raised my glass. To circles, I said. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A toast, I thought, a brown table, a glass, the napkin with a wet circle. How many things are permanent? The circle, a symbol of continuity and continuation, yet, this circle will be gone soon, dried up and thrown away, carted off and dumped into a landfill and forever changed. Are we in life, like the napkin, imprinted, used and thrown away? Martie wow....to circles, yes indeed. VERy thought provoking piece. Excellently written. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Martie,...I could read this a thousand times. Oh Amazing. *sigh*....THIS is beautiful. Got me thinking and my heart sort of racing. Thanks. Be well. *Peace. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian--thanks so much for the wow, I'm glad you like circles too. SpitFire--thanks for your enthusiastic response! Made me smile |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow Martie, I love this one! As Brian said, it certainly makes you think. Beginings, endings, circles........ God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
this poem is great, actually i rather think it's almost perfect (if there ever is a perfect poem).. it really makes you think and most importantly, it makes you feel.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Circles, spirals dizzying wonders. Well put and very true. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I love a poem where I get a visin as Im reading it, and this definetely did that for me. Interesting concept, and very well done!!!! Enjoyed this very much!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very thought provoking. And incredibly vivid images. Catalinamoon |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eagle One--So glad it made you think...that's a really good thing! moshpit--what a wonderful compliment! Kethry--thank you so much for seeing the truth in this poem and for your sweet reply. Deborah--I do too, thanks for saying that mine did that for you. catalinamoon--thank so much for the wonderful reply! |
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