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L Tiuch
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY

0 posted 2000-08-03 04:19 PM


Her green eyes flash with anger
Again, I have done nothing right
She gets on the phone and laughs and smiles...
Things I don't see anymore
Her feet stomp up the stairs and
I silently think of the time she will be out of my home...
And I smile!
She demands that I do this or that
And I picture myself putting her up for adoption
She comes in from school and cries
As she she tells me her troubles...
My heart aches with her pain.
Her green eyes, swollen and red, stare
At me in the darkness...
I've had a bad dream, can I sleep with you?
She crawls in, still quivering from fright
I gather her into my arms, our hearts beat as one
And I wish that this moment, and this daughter of mine..
Would never change.

Linda Tiuch


© Copyright 2000 Linda Tiuch - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-08-03 04:26 PM


Veeeery interesting to see the swing of emotions isn't soley on the (teenager's) side. Likin' much!  
Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
2 posted 2000-08-03 06:57 PM


Seeing past the surface is a halmark of a great person.
             The world is a hard place to live in and we all take the stress in our own way.  But deep down, we are all the same.  All children, interrupted by some feverish nightmare. Your daughter is very lucky to have a parent of your stature and resolve.




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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
3 posted 2000-08-03 09:49 PM


Hmmmmm....Put her up for adoption??????  I can only echo deranger's reply, your kids are very lucky to have you indeed!  Wonderful piece.  Bonnie
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-08-03 10:47 PM


What a flawless interpretation of the emotions a Mom goes through.  Loved it.
Catalinamoon

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-08-04 12:54 PM


Oh wow! The ups and downs of the best kind of love in a nutshell!
Excellent!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
6 posted 2000-08-04 01:22 AM


ah, i think this may be the first i've read from you..and i say what a very fitting view of motherhood this is!Have you been peeking into my life? LOL
This was great and i'll be back for more!

MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
7 posted 2000-08-04 02:52 AM


what cuteness...its kewl...i liked it much....lemme see more! hehe!
MiSeRyDivine~~

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
8 posted 2000-08-04 11:08 AM


Linda..As the father of two daughters, I can understand this.  My oldest swears I cursed her by saying, "I hope one day you have a daughter just like you".  She does...and now she knows.  Nice poem...and so true.  Hardrock
EWDrake
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 183
NC, USA
9 posted 2000-08-04 12:49 PM


Linda, I have a blue eyed boy, and boy do I know this song and dance! Excellent job, m'lady, with relating that parents are afterall just human too!
Great read...
Evan

With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out.
~EWD~


Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2000-08-05 08:35 AM


Linda, as the mother of three children I canm relate to this one. It's so real and spot on.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
11 posted 2000-08-05 08:52 AM


My goodness, Hardrock shares my sentiments, My mom always said I hope you get one just like you...and I did!!! Now I say that too!!! This was a wonderful showing of a mothers devotion and love!!! Just wonderful!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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