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MiseryDivine
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

0 posted 2000-08-03 12:57 PM


~Before you Left~

I slowly look away
I cant bear to meet your eyes
You and me
We used to be, so close
Practically inseperable
Two beings intertwined into one
now we dance alone
in our own little desolate corners
iside this huge lonely world
I really loved you
I gave you my all
Sometimes i heard it in your vioce
you were drifting
yet i wanted so bad to hold on
I could never hurt you
But did you really ever care?
your words were made of sugar
but your actions, like stones, beating me senseless
It feels as if none of this
is actually real, a cruel dream
how could you have forgotten?
the many promises you made to me
now you act as im a waste of your precious time
you never tried to make it work between us
yet i miss you
the way you danced
the way you loved me
those poems you wrote about us
just beautiful...
you made me smile
you held me hand
I miss your love
but i cant bear to make my eyes meet yours
so i merely look away
i keep walking
passing you by
I look back only to realize
that you've gone
and i begin to cry.

~MiseRyDivine~~



All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

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Xeonox
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1 posted 2000-08-03 01:08 AM


Ouch, I hope this is not written on a real life experience.

your words were made of sugar
but your actions, like stones, beating me senseless.

I love those two lines. Just awesome!!!

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
2 posted 2000-08-03 01:12 AM


(sigh)....i really wish it wasn't
thanx for ur reply...Xeonox

mustlove_mstleave
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 8

3 posted 2000-08-03 01:46 AM


Damn, painful feelings are always powerful just as it is in this poem..
Even when we are kept from being loved by ones we love, still we will crave to certain times when our hearts used to be filled..and hands occupied..
...we cant deny how much we long to woeful pleasure!
Great job...

Dedreia
Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
4 posted 2000-08-03 02:12 AM


Did my husband talk to you?  Sounds like he wrote it...as we have drifted so far apart. Dee

"It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen

Lynne Dale
Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
5 posted 2000-08-03 03:11 AM


Damn painful to think about, damn powerful to read. I hope you get over the pain soon.
Be well


Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
6 posted 2000-08-03 05:34 AM


this poem does hurt, and i hope that your pain will soon subside...beautiful writing!
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
7 posted 2000-08-03 07:24 AM


I always wish I could find the words to take away the pain of heartbreak that you write about here. It hurts so much I know...Although sad, you did a wonderful job writing and expressing your emotions. Hope things are better very soon!! Take care

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

L Tiuch
Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY
8 posted 2000-08-03 10:45 AM


WOW!  This is a reflection of my marriage. Why is it that so often, one loves with all their being, and the other not at all.  There is nothing sadder than love that is abused.  Linda
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
9 posted 2000-08-03 12:11 PM


Yes WOW is the word used here!  I think we all have been through this at one time or another and yeah it hurts.  You did n excellent job expressing the feelings of so many.  GREAT work

DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


MiseryDivine
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
10 posted 2000-08-04 02:28 AM


oh my geese gosh...wasnt expecting such a huge reply....thank you so much...all of you are so wonderful and great and kind. much love to you all!
MiSerYDivine~~

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

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