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L Tiuch
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0 posted 2000-08-02 03:54 PM



Thirty-one years ago today
A father gave his daughter away
The sun was shining, the sky so blue
As both of them whispered their "I dos"
The love in her heart was oh, so pure
Their lives together would surely endure
The first indiscretion didn't take long
And left her wondering what she'd done wrong?
So she worked even harder to make him a home
But it just didn't matter, for still he did roam
After three years their first son was born
A reason to celebrate that early morn
Things would get better, more like her dreams
No one ever heard her internal screams
With a husband and baby things couldn't be bad
She should be thankful for this life that she had
Two children followed, and those three were her life
She tried hard to raise them in spite of the strife
She'd wait to leave him until they were grown
Her nightmares and heartache she held as her own
After seventeen years to her father she cried
It's over, he's gone, please know how I've tried
As he hugged her and gently wiped her tears away
I've never been prouder of you, she heard him say.

Linda Tiuch









[This message has been edited by L Tiuch (edited 08-02-2000).]

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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
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saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-08-02 04:10 PM


This poem is terribly sad and yet uplifting. An awful (though all too common story) of a sad marriage, but at least there is a great dad there!
I really liked it a lot!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
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2 posted 2000-08-02 04:29 PM


Oh I loved this. The pain of being lost for so many yrs, and that wonderful"dad" still their for his daughter. This brought some memories of my dad back, he was always there for me no matter waht. You did a superb job of portraying hope and a happy ending. Just loved it!!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Martie
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3 posted 2000-08-02 06:04 PM


Well done, true to life story with a great ending.
BSC
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4 posted 2000-08-02 06:06 PM


Okay, tears welled up with this one....You done good kid, and thank God for dear old Dad.  You have certainly captured the heartache and hope in this beautifully written poem. Bonnie
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
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New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-08-03 08:28 AM


Linda..This is exceptional.  A great poem of your married life...written from beginning til now.  I just hope I can be as good a father to my girls as your dad was to you.  Hardrock
EWDrake
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since 2000-07-30
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NC, USA
6 posted 2000-08-03 08:49 AM


17 years of emotion pent and spent in so few words to draw an amazingly clear picture! This is excellent. Your lament is tangible...I wish you luck...

Evan Drake

With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out.
~EWD~

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
7 posted 2000-08-03 09:38 AM


This is so clear and hopeful despite the sdaness which shines through, so glad your dad could be there for you.
Keth

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
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Perth, Western Australia, Australia
8 posted 2000-08-03 11:36 AM


This poem touches home with me, for many reasons.....you put to words the feelings so many spouses have....and you did a wonderful job of it! very touching, very much felt!
L Tiuch
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY
9 posted 2000-08-03 03:34 PM


Thank you all for your kind words.  What a difference 31 years make, and God Bless my dad, who at 85, is still the man in my life.
Linda

catalinamoon
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10 posted 2000-08-03 03:50 PM


Linda, that brought me to tears, sad and hauntingly beautiful. Thank God for a wonderful Dad.
Sandra

SpitFire
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11 posted 2000-08-03 06:03 PM


~Linda,...wow, what a brave and strong woman. What a heart heavy scene you painted before the ending. Just lovely there, with that (ending). A blessing. Take care now. *Peace.
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