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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-08-02 12:48 PM

Moment Of Tranquility

She tiptoed across the moon's smile
and swung from the vines of it's will.
She dusted her pale face with
sprinkles of it's golden glow
and drank from it's deepened well.
She swallowed it's beauty
and tasted it's strength,
and sang of the nights they had had.
Her up there, on top of the world,
on top of the troubles at home.
High above the anguish
on the antique chair,
in the corner at the house.
It sits there while she's tiptoeing,
it waits for her return.
The pain lurks with anticipation,
she, it's prey is flying free for the time.
It encircles her space
and screams out to night's sky
with warnings of heat to be had.
The sounds fail to reach her as
she gently tiptoes to the moon's ear,
to thank it for the peace,
for the moment of tranquility
it has so generously bathed her in.

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

1 posted 2000-08-02 12:54 PM

Wow! I really liked this. Mmmm. Loved how you described the moon.

Joy

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

2 posted 2000-08-02 12:54 PM

Fire, oh fire!
How, just how do you do it?
This is simply celestial!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2000-08-02 01:28 PM

Well you know you got me on this one, moon lover that I am. Beautiful, perfect. You just keep putting out these wonderful poems.
Catalinamoon

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2000-08-02 01:47 PM

How wonderful to find such peace in the moon and to describe it so well...everyone needs a place to go for peace when the rocking chair gets to rough...beautiful poetry, SpitFire!!!

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2000-08-02 05:03 PM

reminds me of that Patti Smith song "Dancing barefoot" A magical piece. amazing images and you have got me in front of the computer screen grooving to your poetry.

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

6 posted 2000-08-02 08:41 PM

SpitFire...I agree, how DO you do it? You pulled me in and kept me there. Marvelous!! Hardrock

tookabear
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since 2000-07-24

Posts 28
Mansfield, TX USA

7 posted 2000-08-02 10:39 PM

Beautiful poem. I loved it.

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia

8 posted 2000-08-02 11:22 PM

and i'll join in the chorus as well....wonderful poem about a beautiful subject written by a talented poet! very much enjoyed!

Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith
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since 2000-02-12

Posts 197
Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A.

9 posted 2000-08-02 11:31 PM

Your opening line is magnificent in this piece. One I wish i had written.
Thank you for sharing your vision with us.

Sing while you may
-The Prophet Q'spel

Your pain is for you alone
As it is
As it was
As it will be forever
Amen
-The Prophet Q'spel

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18

Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria

10 posted 2000-08-03 03:14 AM

Heavenly poem. I loved it.

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.

L Tiuch
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since 2000-02-04

Posts 151
NY

11 posted 2000-08-03 10:29 AM

I really liked this a lot! Those fleeting tranquil moments that give us the courage and strength to return to reality. WOW! Linda

Verve
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

12 posted 2000-08-03 11:21 AM

Amazing poem ... such graceful images ...
I am becoming a big fan of yours!

~verve

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2000-08-03 03:05 PM

Lovely writing..we all need to find those moments of tranquility...James

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

14 posted 2000-08-04 06:15 PM

Just wanted to add my compliment to the list, well done! Ohhh! for but a few of those tranquil moments....

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown

insect
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since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

15 posted 2000-08-12 01:03 AM

U R A GR8T POET!

[This message has been edited by insect (edited 08-12-2000).]

LM
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since 2000-08-03

Posts 585

16 posted 2000-08-12 04:10 AM

Very beautiful poem!
Two thumbs up!!!

taramw
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

17 posted 2000-08-12 08:07 AM

What else can I say!?!

Terrific - as always!!!

kat
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since 2000-05-20

Posts 387

18 posted 2000-08-12 05:50 PM

Spitfire: This was incredible!!! I loved it!..

kat

bubbles chan
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since 2000-08-08

Posts 17

19 posted 2000-08-13 12:18 PM

I love it, very descriptive

Time and space are not constant, but floating around like the inside of a giant metaphysical lava lamp

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

20 posted 2000-08-14 01:42 PM

SpitFire-A very telling piece from your heart. You paint a very sad and descriptive piece.

demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11

Posts 211
Dehradun

21 posted 2000-08-14 03:18 PM

That was indeed very lovely. Claps!
Deepak

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