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L Tiuch
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY

0 posted 2000-08-02 10:51 AM



The door shuts softly
Footsteps whisper up the stairs
Silently, street clothes drop to the floor
A nightgown slithers over shoulders
Bed springs creak...in protest
The wind murmurs...she's home.
Two feet hit the floor
A door slams loudly
Footsteps pound noisily up the stairs
Her door slams open
Where have you been?
The silent stillness shatters

Linda Tiuch

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kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
1 posted 2000-08-02 11:26 AM


very very well done linda.  what an image and moment in time you capture here.  excellent work.

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-08-02 12:12 PM


~Ah Gosh,...you got me with this one. I was there. You've captured this so well that I could feel the anticipation as those feet pounded up those stairs. Well done. Take it easy. *Peace.
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
3 posted 2000-08-02 12:47 PM


What an image! Perfect!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-08-02 12:57 PM


Mmmm. I like. What a wonderful image you've created with your words.

Joy

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-08-02 01:22 PM


Oooh, that was a good one, L, feel the stress in the person listening to the footsteps. Intense.
BSC
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6 posted 2000-08-02 10:02 PM


Linda --- I would not want to be the one on the other side of that door...I've heard those footsteps!!!  Wonderful images you've brushed with your pen, felt like I was right there.  Bonnie
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