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Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

0 posted 2000-08-01 11:06 PM


Wind Spin

I hang
On the turn of your words, your letters,
Each of them a swivel
That allows me to spin
With the winds of your love,
Caught in the sunlight of your phrases,
Casting kaliedoscopic colors across the walls
Of my existence.

When the clouds come
And I know they will,
Will you take away my bearings,
like all the others,
And just leave me
Twisting in the wind?



© Copyright 2000 Marv Hardin - All Rights Reserved
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
1 posted 2000-08-01 11:13 PM


marv, you never cease to amaze me.  i am a leaf on the same tree, just letting the wind have its way with me.  this is exceptional work, marv.  very well done with few words.

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
2 posted 2000-08-01 11:16 PM


To the point, and boy did it make a point!  Good work here...realizing I'm not such an interrogative person after all!  Look forward to more!

Jerm

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-08-01 11:19 PM


Beautiful Marv, different style, perfect of course. Love it. Love you
sgreybe
Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
4 posted 2000-08-02 02:42 AM


Dear Marv

As always, my friend, your work astounds me.  Such power and sadness in so few words.  Boy oh boy can I relate.  Feel with you man.

Great work.
Love Sylvia

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-08-02 03:08 AM


Marvin,
the words you write are beyond description. I would babble if I tried to describe them in any way.
But I am sure you will not be left spinning in the wind again  


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
6 posted 2000-08-02 09:15 AM


You are the enchanter Hardrock, adding that touch of sadness along with beautiful imagery...Loved this piece!! Lost for words...

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-08-02 09:21 AM


~Marvin,...I love reading this, I love HEARING it. Reading it aloud just sounds so right. Wind Spin,...even the title says so much to me....you definately caught me in the whirl. Sheer talent. Take care H. *Peace.
Lynne Dale
Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
8 posted 2000-08-02 10:07 AM


Amazing. Great imagery. Lost for words.
Be well

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
9 posted 2000-08-02 10:32 AM


Oh Hardrock, I must agree with everyone here.  This was beautiful    You have such a talent for poetry.  I wish to write as that one day also.

Thanx
DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


L Tiuch
Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY
10 posted 2000-08-02 10:40 AM


I can only echo all that has been said before me.  Beautifully written with so much said in so few words.  Linda
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
11 posted 2000-08-02 01:55 PM


I have a feeling, Hardrock, that even if you felt yourself twisting in the wind, you would write a beautiful heart felt poem about it which would help to bring you peace.

Wonderful poem!

poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
12 posted 2000-08-02 11:28 PM


you are gifted and this poem is beautiful...the words just climbed inside of me and nested there...and that is a very wonderful feeling....poetry like this is ALWAYS felt!
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